Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 1 Chapter 4
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After all, no matter the place or time, where there is a corporation, there are outlaws.
Unkani: "Corporation"? Seems like an odd word to use here. "Outlaw" is also a strange word to be using here. Deviant, rebel(on a second thought, this is also a very harsh word), or the oft-loved word,(oops, I forgot to finish this thought) delinquent, could be good alternatives.
Pudding321: This is a metaphor used by the writer. The writer will extrapolate this later.
Unkani: Anyways, the main issue is that "corporation" implies a company, rather than a "society". It's also odd to refer to students as "outlaws", as that brings the negative connotation of them being hardened criminals, while what's happening here is a more minor-- civil disobedience. Typically, translators like to use "delinquent", though I'm not entirely convinced that this would be the most appropriate word either. I suppose a close word that would describe the concept here would be "insubordination", a purposeful refusal to comply with the rules.
The Literature club reorganizes the activity record into...
Having added a "The" before "Literature club" made me realize that I'm not quite sure if the Literature Club should be a proper noun or not. Also, it seems that in Ch. 1, "Literature Study Club" was used, before it simply became the "literature club" Unkani 20:00, 9 August 2012 (CDT)
Sorry for that. I think we need some consistency in which proper noun to use for the series. Different translations have different proper nouns for the club. Here are some examples: The Literature Club, Literature Study Club, Culture Club, Cultural Study Club. Personally, I think Culture Club is more close to what the writer means. But Literature Club sounds better. Pudding321 22:40, 9 August 2012 (CDT)
Does the club even do anything remotely like reading? From what I know so far, they only write the "Bunken News" and goof around. Going by that, "Literature Club" wouldn't be the most appropriate. Unkani (talk) 00:56, 16 August 2012 (CDT)
