Talk:Dantalian no Shoka:Volume1 Chapter7

"It was a town with a calm mood and houses made of stone since olden days."

This sentence is kind of ambiguous. Is the calm mood since the olden days, or the stone? In the latter case, another term describing the stone might be better, such as weathered.

"It was also impossible to see it from far away because of heights and forests."

Are these "heights" better replaced by "hills"?

"The object that was spouting out this blade-like flame wasn't a staff anymore. The long body part was a balancer to bear up against the impact when shooting and the part that looked like a censer was a muzzle brake to counter the recoil."

I'm not sure what happens here, but I imagine that the staff transformed into a gun or rifle of some sort. It would seem that "became" would be more appropriate than "was" if that's the case. Also, I didn't think the "balancer" in this case was the right term. After some research, I think the part mentioned is like the "stock" of a rifle. Unkani 06:20, 15 August 2011 (UCT)