User talk:Demon8796

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Hi, do keep all narrative tense to past tense. (this is about the short story about the 4th.) I'll follow up with a more detailed feedback later this week. --KuroiHikari (Talk | ) 09:50, 16 October 2013 (CDT)

Ok, it's fine. 1 thing though, the part about number 4 primogenitor is intentional. So, if you have a good way to say fourth primogenitor without using fourth primogenitor, I'll love to see your suggestion. --KuroiHikari (Talk | ) 10:02, 16 October 2013 (CDT)