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*[[user:Ilebur|Ilebur]]
 
*[[user:Ilebur|Ilebur]]
** Read through the whole thing ''in the Text section'' (besides H-Scene) rephrasing things a bit and correcting typos here and there. Will come back later to do a proper proofread. Completely rewrote 0048-0054 and 0306.
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** Read through the whole thing ''in the Text section'' (besides H-Scene) rephrasing things a bit and correcting typos here and there. Will come back later to do a proper proofread. Didn't dare to touch the electric repairs stuff too much with my japanese. Completely rewrote 0048-0054 and 0306.
** Went with "beating" for "ぽかぽか", if someone comes up with something put it down there (0308-0333).
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** EDIT: Something better for "ぽかぽか" than "Thump" is definitely necessary, if someone comes up with something put it down there (0308-0333). (''It's supposed to be a double-impact sound (2xPoka). "Hitting" could be acceptable but can get repetetive with the talk about hitting all the time during it anyways.'')
   
 
*[[user:AbstractBlueSky|AbstractBlueSky]]
 
*[[user:AbstractBlueSky|AbstractBlueSky]]

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