Editing Tomoyo After:SEEN0628
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− | ** Read through the whole thing ''in the Text section'' (besides H-Scene) rephrasing things a bit and correcting typos here and there. Will come back later to do a proper proofread. Completely rewrote 0048-0054 and 0306. |
+ | ** Read through the whole thing ''in the Text section'' (besides H-Scene) rephrasing things a bit and correcting typos here and there. Will come back later to do a proper proofread. Didn't dare to touch the electric repairs stuff too much with my japanese. Completely rewrote 0048-0054 and 0306. |
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+ | ** EDIT: Something better for "ぽかぽか" than "Thump" is definitely necessary, if someone comes up with something put it down there (0308-0333). (''It's supposed to be a double-impact sound (2xPoka). "Hitting" could be acceptable but can get repetetive with the talk about hitting all the time during it anyways.'') |
*[[user:AbstractBlueSky|AbstractBlueSky]] |
*[[user:AbstractBlueSky|AbstractBlueSky]] |