Talk:Mushoku Tensei:Web Chapter 81

Translator Note: I've copy/pasted the first half into here before undoing the previous changes, you're free to make smaller edits, but you've changed the meaning of far too many lines, I don't have the time to go through and specify exactly what is wrong in every place you've modified, but you've altered the meaning to an extent where plot related elements are lost from some of the lines. Please use the below to make ONLY the smaller edits again, anything that alters or adds words should be questioned before changing. --Dark Kaito (talk) 00:24, 23 July 2014 (CDT)

Hi there, I just joined after my IP was frozen for trying to improve the Part 2 to Volume 9 Chapter 1's readability. I am unsure about how to resolve that as I lost the page. Anyways, I understand that there is need for translating but I also thought grammar and flow was important for reader enjoyment. I understand there are certain rules, so I figured at the very least I should display the edit so my work wasn't wasted:

A young girl was born as the only daughter of a poor hunter living in a remote region of Asura Kingdom.

Her father was an Elf half-blood.

And then her mother was a human with just a bit of beast race blood mixed; once a slave of the Asura nobility.

Both of them were kind. They raised the young girl pouring their love into her.

From a glimpse you would see nothing but a happy child.

But, her hair was emerald green.

Her hair was putting her life out of order.

Emerald green hair.

According to one passage, the closer a Magic Race's hair is to green the more violent it is said to be.

The race that shook all other races with fear, or the Supard race, had green hair.

And then, the one who lead that Supard race, the Demon God Laplace, had green hair as well.

Although the young girl wasn't a Magic Race, a head full of emerald green hair causes people to be afraid.

A dreaded color.

Even though that's the case, she is a young girl.

The past is the past.

As Asura is far from the Magic Continent, there are few radicals who reject the Magic race.

The young girl and both of her parents were completely unrelated to the Magic Race, her green hair was a rare color mutation.

First townsfolk are surprised to see her green hair. Then they look at it with eyes of wonder. Gradually they accepted it.

But, the ones that accepted it were limited to adults only.

After the young girl began to venture outside alone, she was bullied.

She was ridiculed, had mud balls thrown at her, or sometimes called an 'evil magic race' because of her emerald green hair.

The young girl always passed her time in constant fear of harrassment and frequently cried.

She didn't understand why children of the same age as her would always hurt her.

Her mother pitied her so she kept her infamous emerald hair short and stitched pants for her- which made running away easier than a dress.

Her father talked with the parents of the offending children, petitioning for them to not target his child.

But, it couldn't resolve the fundamental problem.

Practically every time the young girl journeyed outside her land, she was targeted.

To the children, demonizing her was just a game.

Beat up the evil child with the dangerous green hair.

Gathering their strength together to heroically defeat the demon. It was that sort of play.

But, to the young girl it wasn't play.

The children threw dirt, mud, and sometimes stones at the 'demon child'.

If she runs, they pursue. Eventually they would catch up to her when she tired to deliver harsh punishment.

If she resists, they hurt her. Punch, kick, and gang up on the infamous demon girl.

Finally, the adults warned them.

After that, for a period the attacks stopped. But soon the play resurged after they discovered places the adults couldn't see.

The young girl felt hopeless in the world.

Besides her parents, she had no other friends.

She couldn't change the color of her hair.

She couldn't do anything.

She had no choice but to live on meekly. Hang her head low, conceal, try not to stand out.

Then a single young boy saved that young girl.

He was the same age as that young girl.

After seeing the girl being hit with mud balls as it oft played out, this time the young boy ran down the hill full speed, boldly challenging opponents double his own size ... and humiliated them.

That wasn't all, he called out to the young girl with a kind voice.

Warm water came forth from his hands and cleansed the young girl of the mud pranks.

He came to her assistance for all sorts of things.

To the young girl his coming was an event on the level of a miracle.

There was a savior to the young girl's daily grind.

The young boy protected the young girl from evil intent.

And then the bullying stopped.

Then, the young boy granted powerful knowledge to the young girl.

He taught her magic.

Although the boy was the same age as the girl, he knew how to produce miracles.

Anything she wanted to know, he taught her.

Letters, magic, natural phenomenon, math...

To the girl, the boy's existence was divine.

The young girl would begin playing more often together with the young boy than any other.

She gradually came to have feelings with him.

Even at her young age, she had thoughts of marriage. She knew of such words as bride, and secretly made the determination that "In the future I'm going to be a bride and marry him."

After that, a variety of things happened, and it become a bit awkward.

However, she loved him.

She thought she would forever be protected by him.

And then, they separated.

They were forced to separate.

The young boy was beaten by his own father and sold to nobles far away.

The young girl thought, 'If I don't save him, if I don't bring him back...'

But, she was stopped by her Elven father.

Back then what exactly he said, the young girl couldn't remember specifically.

Supposedly the young boy had left on a journey to become stronger.

'It's no good. Give it your best, so as to not lose him.'

Something along those lines was said.

The only thing that remained in her ears were just his final words.

"Does Sylphy want to keep on being protected by him forever?"

She remembers just that line.

She also remembers thinking that isn't the case. No.

She remembers thinking that just being protected is no good.

If a time like today happens again, she can't just afford to watch in silence.

'I understand. I'll get strong enough in order to save Rudi!'

That day the young girl changed.

The young girl started actively training herself.

She did the same things that the young boy did everyday on her own.

Building up her physical strength by running, training her body by swinging a stick.

Everyday, she used magic and sharpened her skill.

Even without the young boy and at a young age, the girl somehow knew of the things she should do.

Oftentimes when resting on hay after a long day's training, she thought where her friend went.

Within the young girl's limited knowledge and connections she couldn't know the young boys destination.

She couldn't even predict it.

'During times like these, what would he do?'

'What would he say?'

If you don't know, it's fine if you ask! is what the young boy might say.

The young girl followed that and decided to ask.

She went to ask a person who might know the location of the young boy.

The young girl proceeded to the cleric's office of the village.

It was the place where the mother of the young boy is working.

There, she asked the mother of the young boy about his location.

Naturally, the mother of the young boy smiled. Although she omitted exactly where to the young girl.

The young girl decided to help out at the cleric's office.

It wasn't a decision she needed to think deeply about.

'If I help and get along better with her maybe I might be told. Might be told where my friend is.' Is what she thought somewhere in her heart.

Additionally, her father said, "That sort of thing happens, but it's good if you get along with his family," was another of the reasons.

But, the mother of the young boy never let the location of the young boy out of her mouth.

The young girl thought about various means to hear it, but each time she received a small laugh and a cheeky grin, "If you want to meet Rudi, you'll need to give it your best some more."

She was getting nowhere.

The young girl thought, 'It's going nowhere.'

In any case, she thought that if she continued like this there was no meaning to it.

Which is why, she decided to try becoming closer to the maid at the young boy's house.

The young boy also had a father, but she was reluctant to try with him.

Since she saw the scene - where the young boy was beaten.

He was an opponent she doesn't know about. It wasn't that she resented him, but she still hesitated to talk to him while thinking she might be beaten as well.

The maid was devoted.

She was devoted towards the young boy.

"I'm sure in the future Rudeus-sama will be invited into a position similar to the Royal Family. If you are to become the wife of Rudeus-sama, you have no choice but to learn the conduct so that you are able to act normally in society."

After being told that, half forcefully, she started to be instructed on manners and etiquette.

Even though that was the case, after being told that it was for the young boy's sake, the young girl wouldn't say no to it.

The way to walk in the royal court and the method to fit in a dress, manner of speaking, the methods to greet, etc..

She really had doubts about whether this kind of thing was necessary.

However, the young girl was honest and had good memory.

However, in regards to the vital location of the young boy, the maid would never let it out of her mouth.

Just like this it continued until her 10 year old birthday.

The only one to congratulate her for her 10th birthday was her mother.

Recently the monsters in the forest had been active, therefore, her father had to remain on lookout.

Since her father as a hunter was familiar with the forest, when it came down it to he had to hunt.

"Do you really have to go that far on her 10th birthday?"

Is how her mother asked her father.

However, the young girl thought it couldn't be helped and gave up.

At any rate, it was the same at the time of her 5th birthday as well.

The birthday present she received from her mother was a white one piece dress.

For the sake of this day, her father saved up money and bought some cloth, then her mother stitched it for her.

After immediately putting it on her mother said, "It suits you. You look beautiful." and praised her.

The young girl said, "eh~", while laughing bashfully, thinking that she wanted to show it to the young boy as well.

And then simultaneously, she started to worry about what the young boy was doing.

She wondered if he wasn't inconvenienced in an unknown place.

And she wondered if he was congratulated for his 10th year old birthday.

She thought, I want to send him something as well.

However, she couldn't think of anything that he would want.

After asking her mother, "If it's something like that then anything works." was said.

The next day when her father returned, she asked and received the suggestion, "Then, it would be good if you sent him a charm of good luck that is handed down in our family."

She was told that it was a pendant carved from wood and if it's kept on their body then good things will happen.

Her father always kept one somewhere on his body as well.

It seems it was something given to her father when he became independent from her grandmother a female elf.

After hearing that the young girl somehow felt that it was a good choice.

Everyday the young girl gave it her best to carve the wood.

It was her first time wood carving. The young girl was by no means skillful.

However, she gave it her best effort, everyday carving.

And then she completed it.

It was clumsy, but it somehow had taken shape.

And then a problem rose to the surface.

It's fine that she made it, but she had no method to hand it over.

After worrying over it, the young boy's maid made a suggestion.

"If that's the case, I'll mix it in with the goods being sent."

She decided for that to be done.

The young girl told the maid countless times, "It's a precious item so absolutely made sure it's sent, okay."

The maid acknowledged that, since it was a precious item it would absolutely be delivered.

And she agreed to it.

A short while after that.

The teleport happened.

Part 2

The young girl was in the clouds and the buildings and trees looked tiny.

"Eh!!?"

The intense sensation in the stomach of a slow free-falling. 'Is this a dream?' The suffocating heights making it difficult to breathe.

The thin girl's body piercing through the moist clouds. The smells and tastes.

'I was just…'

And then terror.

Her entire body was telling her that this wasn't a dream.

"Hiii~!!!"

The young girl heard a scream escaping her throat and felt her eye's tearing.

The scream promoted the fact that this sensation was reality.

She didn't know how.

But, she was in the sky. Falling.

'If I don't do something.'

'I'm going to die'

Die.

Without a doubt die.

No matter how young the young girl is, she clearly understood the fact that she would die if she fell from such a height.

'I don't want to die!'

She used all of her magic power.

She knew that the ground was rapidly expanding in focus.

The young girl raised the wind.

Aimed directly below herself in order to fall onto it.

She thought that her velocity would fall a bit.

However, she quickly returned to her previous velocity.

Wind was no good.

What would be good to do at this kind of time?

What did the young boy say?

Remember, remember.

Didn't the young boy say anything?

What to do at a time when you're falling from a high place…

"Soften the impact," he said in a calm voice.

'Soften?'

“That's right. Engulf yourself in something soft.”

However, exactly how soft?

What would it be good to create?

I don't know, I don't know, I don't know!

She formed water clouds, spun upward wind currents, layered earth sheets, controlled fire.

'Slow down~...!'

She did everything she could in a frenzy.

But... she crashed.

She felt her entire body submersed into the ground in a crater.

'Am I alive?'

Her body covered in moderate cuts, bruises, dirt and grass clumping to her clammy skin, unbearable pain in both of her legs.

It was a miserable state, her beaten up again, but the young girl survived.

She laid there for a few moments, looking up to where she just was...

But... somehow I softened the crash (as Rudi once told me) ... or.

With only fractures, she survived a fall from a fatally high altitude...

But, she felt like sharp needles stabbing into her legs.

“Ugo . . . aaa!"

In plain sight, a monster stood there.

It looked like a huge wild boar... but it was walking on two legs and had four arms.

The young girl heard about this monster. She was told by her father if she were to ever encounter it," Absolutely never get close. Without letting out a sound... wait for it to pass," "If you're noticed by it then use magic to escape as fast as you can." It was an opponent where she was told to do that. Terminate Boar. The young girl had many things she did not know, but she did know that the Terminate Boar was rarely seen. It was said they come out from the forest and would attack with an E rank monster, the Assault Dog, accompanying it. Locally, it is the most dangerous monster in Asura.

Unusual for the peaceful Asura Kingdom, it was a monster worthy of C rank. The danger of it rises up from C rank to B rank if it is accompanied by Assault Dogs. That is most certainly the Terminate Boar.

"Kyaaa~!" Frantically, the young girl screamed and frantically swelled up magic towards the menacing Terminate Boar.

Intermediate Magic, [Icicle Breaker].

She wasn't holding back at all... Full Power.

She was striking it with her strongest magic from the start stretching her utmost limits.

It was a direct hit.

The Terminate Boar froze two layers thick, fell next to her, shattered, and frozen shards scattered near her.

"Ha . . . ha . . . agu!!"

After trying to stand up in a breath, she realized that both of her leg's bones were practically shattered too.

The young girl used healing magic and swiftly healed them.

Ever since she assisted at the cleric's office in the healing of people, healing magic was a strong point of hers.

But, it wasn't as if she was used to this level of severe, sudden pain.

She bitterly used the magic with a tear-stained face.

" . . . Ha . . . ha."

Standing up. Shortness of breath.

An intense headache started up.

Dizziness. Her consciousness was warping and she felt faint.

Later on, the young girl realized she was out of magic power. Suppressing the free-falling entry and even defeating a fearsome monster with magic. Not any type of magic, all of it was done without restraint using her greatest magic. Which is why, the young girl's magic power was exhausted.

"A...are we saved? Y...you, where did you appear from? What is your name?"

She heard a voice from behind her.

With her head throbbing and her vision hazy, the young girl turned her attention to this voice.

There was a... girl?

With golden hair... and ... a beautiful face that almost gives the impression it is transparent...

It was a girl wearing a pure white one piece with detailed embroidery... it seemed the materials were 1,000 times more expensive than what she received for her birthday.

On the angelic girl's side, leaned a boy whose arm was injured and was leaning against a tree. And next to this boy, a man was... It seemed like his robe was crimson red and wet with blood. Yes, the man was soaked in . . . blood.

"Sylphiette . . . ”

The young girl answered and fainted.

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This is how Sylphy encountered Asura Kingdom, Second Princess Ariel Anemoi Asura.

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I knew it, I knew it, I FREAKING KNEW IT! Sylphy was actually Fitts-sempai! The foreshadowing was quite great! Especially when Fitts described his master, how he kept some things from Rudeus and other clues here and there. BBeLiN (talk) 07:32, 27 July 2014 (CDT)