Talk:Mushoku Tensei:Web Chapter 82

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Since nobody really uses these pages I'm just going to list all my edits and questions here

I love you editors... I really do. This chapter jumps around a great deal in present and past tense between paragraphs so there is are bound to be mistakes in that area. Every change seems satisfactory so far. --Skui


Edits Made

  • Added headers and subheaders
  • In the Garden of plants where the blossoming white flowers were collected. (Capitalized plants)
  • also known as, The Garden of White Lilies. (Capitalized also)
  • instantly kills the guard of the princess (changed kills to killed)
  • protected the princess' life (added s after ')
  • Such as thing happening (as to a)
  • A Demon appearing in the Royal Palace is an unprecedented incident. (is to was)
  • who is charge of the Royal Palace's defense (added in after is)
  • it's tentative collapse. (it's to its)
  • It is a matter of course to receive well the hero (switched well and receive)(Maybe change in future to warmly instead of well?)
  • well, The second princess Ariel (lowercase the for The)
  • would not (contracted to wouldn't)
  • time, The Princess and Luke would both be dead (The to the)
  • [If the Princess say so.] (say to says)

Give me a sec be right back, computer problems



Questions on Changes

1. To the This word, Protection knight who are Luke also agreed. (I'm going to change this, To these words, Protection Knight Luke also agreed) >> sounds much better. I did make an error here though, Any instances of 'Protection knight' need to be changed to the more proper titled Guardian knight or Knight-guardian if they are spotted. Thanks! --Skui

I'm going to go with Guardian Knight -Marrow (talk) 11:26, 31 July 2014 (CDT)

2. Too luxurious was the bed. Too luxurious were the clothes the people wore. Too luxurious was the room. I don't know the reason why I'm in such a amazing luxurious place.

This seems awkward to me, would it be alright if I changed it to something like

(The bed, the peoples' clothing, and the room were all too luxurious.)I don't know the reason why I'm in such a amazing, luxurious place.

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