Difference between revisions of "Kara no Kyoukai:Chapter01 00"
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That day, I chose to take the main street home. |
That day, I chose to take the main street home. |
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| − | It was just |
+ | It was just a whim, and a very rare thing for me to do. |
| − | Walking woodenly along the building street that I was tired of seeing, someone fell. |
+ | Walking woodenly along the building street that I was tired of seeing day in and day out, someone fell. |
| − | It was a squishing sound that you |
+ | It was a squishing sound that you should never hear. |
| − | The person obviously died from falling off a building. |
+ | The person lying on the pavement, broken, had obviously died from falling off a building. |
| − | A crimson color |
+ | A crimson color slowly seeped onto the concrete. |
| − | The only features that remained were the dark |
+ | The only features that remained were the dark black hair, and the pale, thin fragile looking limbs. |
And that featureless, crushed face. |
And that featureless, crushed face. |
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The whole scene reminded me of a flattened flower, tucked between the pages of an old book. |
The whole scene reminded me of a flattened flower, tucked between the pages of an old book. |
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| − | Probably because the corpse, with |
+ | Probably because the corpse, with its neck bent unnaturally, looked like a broken lily to me... |
／Overlooking View (Thanatos) -Fujoh Kirie- |
／Overlooking View (Thanatos) -Fujoh Kirie- |
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Revision as of 07:07, 17 August 2008
That day, I chose to take the main street home. It was just a whim, and a very rare thing for me to do.
Walking woodenly along the building street that I was tired of seeing day in and day out, someone fell. It was a squishing sound that you should never hear. The person lying on the pavement, broken, had obviously died from falling off a building. A crimson color slowly seeped onto the concrete. The only features that remained were the dark black hair, and the pale, thin fragile looking limbs.
And that featureless, crushed face.
The whole scene reminded me of a flattened flower, tucked between the pages of an old book.
Probably because the corpse, with its neck bent unnaturally, looked like a broken lily to me...
／Overlooking View (Thanatos) -Fujoh Kirie-
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