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No problem. You've done a great job so far. Longer discussions should be moved to the talk page for the chapter, though. [[User:Unkani|Unkani]] 03:05, 8 August 2012 (CDT) |
No problem. You've done a great job so far. Longer discussions should be moved to the talk page for the chapter, though. [[User:Unkani|Unkani]] 03:05, 8 August 2012 (CDT) |
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| − | Are you trying to turn all of the tenses in the story to past tense? Actually, facts, specifically the status in the fourth chapter, should be in present tense. I think it's fine to use past tense in some sense, but not all are changed. |
+ | Are you trying to turn all of the tenses in the story to past tense? Actually, facts, specifically the status of the school in the fourth chapter, should be in present tense. I think it's fine to use past tense in some sense, but not all are changed. |
eg.The total number of clubs established was even over a hundred. Despite this, most clubs were abolished after a few years. |
eg.The total number of clubs established was even over a hundred. Despite this, most clubs were abolished after a few years. |
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The verb of the first sentence should be 'were', not 'was' if based on the next sentence. [[User:Pudding321|Pudding321]] 06:41, 9 August 2012 (CDT) |
The verb of the first sentence should be 'were', not 'was' if based on the next sentence. [[User:Pudding321|Pudding321]] 06:41, 9 August 2012 (CDT) |
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Kokoro Connect
Thanks for your detailed edit, it was great. I used "**" in those "<!--" to represent my reply to your notes. Pudding321 17:18, 7 August 2012 (CDT)
No problem. You've done a great job so far. Longer discussions should be moved to the talk page for the chapter, though. Unkani 03:05, 8 August 2012 (CDT)
Are you trying to turn all of the tenses in the story to past tense? Actually, facts, specifically the status of the school in the fourth chapter, should be in present tense. I think it's fine to use past tense in some sense, but not all are changed. eg.The total number of clubs established was even over a hundred. Despite this, most clubs were abolished after a few years. The verb of the first sentence should be 'were', not 'was' if based on the next sentence. Pudding321 06:41, 9 August 2012 (CDT)
