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== [[zeroNT:Gandvol01editchpter04control|Raw English Translation Available Here]] ==
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== Chapter 04 - Part One ==
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=== Chapter Four: A Familiar's Day ===
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===Chapter One: A Familiar's Day===
 
   
 
It had been a week since Saito started his life as Louise's familiar at Tristain Magic Academy. If one were to explain an average day for Saito, it would read like the following: <!-- <Cala> The tense in this chapter becomes disjunctional at times from this point onwards. I'm guessing it's supposed to be a 'he does this, he does that' sort of description, weaved into recounts of certain episodes, but it still confused me plenty. Hack apart at your own discretion... oh, but do consult me or the original text whenever possible. -->
 
It had been a week since Saito started his life as Louise's familiar at Tristain Magic Academy. If one were to explain an average day for Saito, it would read like the following: <!-- <Cala> The tense in this chapter becomes disjunctional at times from this point onwards. I'm guessing it's supposed to be a 'he does this, he does that' sort of description, weaved into recounts of certain episodes, but it still confused me plenty. Hack apart at your own discretion... oh, but do consult me or the original text whenever possible. -->
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First, like the majority of animals and humans in Tristain, he woke up in the morning. His bed was, as usual, the floor, though compared to the first day it had mostly improved. Finding that his body hurt all night if he slept on the hard floor, Saito had asked the maid Siesta for some of the hay that was fed to the horses and had packed it into a corner of the room. Saito slept on the pile of <!-- <andi> pile of may not be necessary, just a thought. --> hay, wrapped in the blanket that Louise had so "graciously" bestowed upon him.
 
First, like the majority of animals and humans in Tristain, he woke up in the morning. His bed was, as usual, the floor, though compared to the first day it had mostly improved. Finding that his body hurt all night if he slept on the hard floor, Saito had asked the maid Siesta for some of the hay that was fed to the horses and had packed it into a corner of the room. Saito slept on the pile of <!-- <andi> pile of may not be necessary, just a thought. --> hay, wrapped in the blanket that Louise had so "graciously" bestowed upon him.
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"A stupid familiar that has to be woken by its master needs to be punished." Louise never forgot to remind him. <!-- <andi> does anyone else think that "punishment" would work better than "to be punished" here? Perhaps "needs punishment" could be supplanted with "requires punishment"? -->
 
"A stupid familiar that has to be woken by its master needs to be punished." Louise never forgot to remind him. <!-- <andi> does anyone else think that "punishment" would work better than "to be punished" here? Perhaps "needs punishment" could be supplanted with "requires punishment"? -->
   
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If Saito ever overslept, he'd be denied breakfast. <!-- <andi> back to overslept, as per tng. makes sense. -->
 
If Saito ever overslept, he'd be denied breakfast. <!-- <andi> back to overslept, as per tng. makes sense. -->
   
 
Once woken up, Louise got changed. She put on her underwear by herself, but made Saito dress her in her uniform. This was mentioned before.
 
Once woken up, Louise got changed. She put on her underwear by herself, but made Saito dress her in her uniform. This was mentioned before.
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<!-- <the_naming_game> "makes Saito put on her uniform." I just wanted to preserve this for posterity... gah, cross-dressing Saito... --> <!-- <andi> this sentnece makes me curl. past/present. past/present. judging by the rest... past. gah. also, already/before; already is unnecessary if both are present -->
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With her enchanting looks, Saito was breathless every time he saw Louise in her underwear. They say you get used to a beautiful lover in three days, but it didn't seem Saito would get used to Louise anytime soon.
 
With her enchanting looks, Saito was breathless every time he saw Louise in her underwear. They say you get used to a beautiful lover in three days, but it didn't seem Saito would get used to Louise anytime soon.
   
 
Maybe because he was her familiar, not her lover. Still, always by Louise's side, he essentially was one. The only difference was in her attitude and treatment of him.
 
Maybe because he was her familiar, not her lover. Still, always by Louise's side, he essentially was one. The only difference was in her attitude and treatment of him.
   
Getting to see Louise like this every day wasn't all bad. However, it was a persistent wound to his pride. When helping Louise into her shoes, for example, he couldn't hide the irritation from his face.
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Getting to see Louise like this every day wasn't all bad, however, it was a persistent wound to his pride. When helping Louise into her shoes, for example, he couldn't hide the irritation from his face.
   
 
At least that much was tolerated, but if Saito ever said anything to set Louise off, things became bothersome.
 
At least that much was tolerated, but if Saito ever said anything to set Louise off, things became bothersome.
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If Saito ever teased Louise about her breast size, or got pouty and said something like, "Do up the buttons yourself," he'd be denied breakfast.
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If ever Saito teased Louise about her breast size, or got pouty and said something like, "do up the buttons yourself," he'd be denied breakfast.
   
Dressed in her uniform, which consisted of a black cloak, a white blouse, and a grey pleated skirt, Louise then washed her face and brushed her teeth. The room didn't even have sensible things like running water installed, so Saito had to go down to the fountain and bring up water for Louise's use in a bucket. And, of course, Louise didn't wash her face herself. She made Saito do it. <!-- <andi> the writer in me says "running water" rather than keeping the pipes... is that too interpretive? --><!-- <the_naming_game> following andi's prompting, with a lot of help from Cala-kun. Oh and forgot to credit Bakafish for helping with the square mage sentence and misc stuff in the previous edit. Any mistakes are probably mine. -->
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Dressed in her uniform, consisting of a black cloak, a white blouse, and a grey pleated skirt, Louise then washed her face and brushed her teeth. The room didn't even have sensible things like running water installed, so Saito had to go <!-- <andi> the writer in me says "running water" rather than keeping the pipes... is that too interpretive? --><!-- <the_naming_game> following andi's prompting, with a lot of help from Cala-kun. Oh and forgot to credit Bakafish for helping with the square mage sentence and misc stuff in the previous edit. Any mistakes are probably mine. -->
 
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down to the fountain and bring up water for Louise's use in a bucket. And of course, Louise didn't wash her face herself. She made Saito do it.
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One morning, while he was wiping her face with a towel, he lightly traced Louise's face with a piece of charcoal he had found.
 
One morning, while he was wiping her face with a towel, he lightly traced Louise's face with a piece of charcoal he had found.
   
Seeing his masterwork drawn on Louise's face, Saito barely held in a snigger. Then in mock obsequience, he politely bowed his head to Louise.
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Seeing his masterwork drawn on Louise's face, Saito barely held in a snigger. Then in pretend obsequience, he politely bowed his head to Louise.
   
 
"Mistress. You are the epitome of beauty this day." <!-- <Cala> 'This day' as opposed to 'today'; butt-kissing servant mode. -->
 
"Mistress. You are the epitome of beauty this day." <!-- <Cala> 'This day' as opposed to 'today'; butt-kissing servant mode. -->
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<!-- 血圧の低いルイズは、眠そうな声で答えた。 -->
 
<!-- 血圧の低いルイズは、眠そうな声で答えた。 -->
   
"…Are you plotting something?"
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"...Are you plotting something?"
   
 
"Myself? I am simply a familiar serving the orders of my mistress. I would not dare to plot!"<!-- <the_naming_game> since this is Saito's super-polite mode, "Myself?" (and to a lesser extent just "Me?") sounds more polite than "Who, me?" without making that part overlong. -->
 
"Myself? I am simply a familiar serving the orders of my mistress. I would not dare to plot!"<!-- <the_naming_game> since this is Saito's super-polite mode, "Myself?" (and to a lesser extent just "Me?") sounds more polite than "Who, me?" without making that part overlong. -->
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Louise was suspicious of Saito's sudden and excessive politeness, but since she was almost late for class, she didn't question him any further.
 
Louise was suspicious of Saito's sudden and excessive politeness, but since she was almost late for class, she didn't question him any further.
   
With her vividly rosy cheeks, charming hazel eyes, and lips that seemed carved from fine coral, Louise knew she didn't need to decorate herself, so she didn't wear any kind of makeup. In other words, this meant she didn't look in the mirror much. And this day was no different. The result: she had absolutely no idea of the "makeup" that Saito had applied on her.
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With her vividly rosy cheeks, charming hazel eyes, and lips that seemed carved from fine coral, Louise knew she didn't need to decorate herself, so she didn't wear any kind of make-up. In other words, this meant she didn't look in the mirror much. And this day was no different. The result: she had absolutely no idea of the "make-up" that Saito had applied on her.
 
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<!-- ... 今のところ装飾は不必要とわかっているルイズは化粧をしない。 -->
   
 
Louise headed out to class in that state. The time being what it was, she didn't encounter anyone in the hallways or stairs.
 
Louise headed out to class in that state. The time being what it was, she didn't encounter anyone in the hallways or stairs.
   
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Louise opened the classroom door panting. As one, her classmates looked at her and exploded with laughter.
 
Louise opened the classroom door panting. As one, her classmates looked at her and exploded with laughter.
   
 
"Hey, looking good, Louise!"
 
"Hey, looking good, Louise!"
   
"Oh my god! That's ''so'' you!"
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"Oh my god! That's '''so''' you!"
   
Afterwards, when Mister Colbert kindly complimented the stylish glasses and mustache sketched on her face, Louise went berserk. She went out into the hallway where Saito was holding his stomach as he rolled on the floor in hysteric laughter, slapped him a dozen times, and cut his meals for the entire day.
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Afterwards, when Mister Colbert kindly complimented the stylish glasses and moustache sketched on her face, Louise went berserk. She went out into the hallway where Saito was holding his stomach as he rolled on the floor in hysteric laughter, slapped him a dozen times, and cut his meals for the entire day.
   
 
According to Louise, a familiar that treated its master's face like a piece of canvas was akin to the demons of old that opposed the Founder Brimir and his many allied gods, and such demons were not worthy of the bread and soup granted by the Lady Queen.
 
According to Louise, a familiar that treated its master's face like a piece of canvas was akin to the demons of old that opposed the Founder Brimir and his many allied gods, and such demons were not worthy of the bread and soup granted by the Lady Queen.
 
   
 
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After breakfast, Saito cleaned Louise's room. This involved sweeping the floor with a broom and wiping the table and windows with a cloth.
 
After breakfast, Saito cleaned Louise's room. This involved sweeping the floor with a broom and wiping the table and windows with a cloth.
   
And then there was the oh-so-enjoyable laundry. He took the laundry down to the fountain and scrubbed it clean against a washboard. There was no warm water, only icy cold water that bit fiercely at his fingers. Louise's underwear were all expensive-looking pieces with lots of lace and frills attached. He would get a meal cut if he happened to damage one, so he had to wash them gently. It was painful work. Tired of it all, he left one particular pair with a slightly torn elastic band in the pile one day. Merely a few days later, Louise walked out obliviously wearing that particular pair, when the elastic snapped entirely. Her panties slid down to her ankles, entangling both of Louise's legs like a trapper's snare. <!-- <Cala> It's a panty trap! Kahaha. --> <!-- <andi> laundry can be a them now? -->
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And then there was the oh-so-enjoyable laundry. He took the laundry down to the fountain and scrubbed it clean against a washboard. There was no warm water, only icy cold water that bit fiercely at his fingers. Louise's underwear were all expensive looking pieces with lots of lace and frills attached. He would get a meal cut if he happened to damage one, so he had to wash them gently. It was painful work. Tired of it all, he left one particular pair with a slightly torn elastic band in the pile one day. Merely a few days later, <!-- <andi> laundry can be a them now? -->
   
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Louise walked out obliviously wearing that particular pair, when the elastic snapped entirely. Her panties slid down to her ankles, entangling both of Louise's legs like a trapper's snare. <!-- <Cala> It's a panty trap! Kahaha. -->
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It just so happened that she was at the top of a staircase, so she tumbled spectacularly down them.
 
It just so happened that she was at the top of a staircase, so she tumbled spectacularly down them.
   
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Louise's voice quavered with fury.
 
Louise's voice quavered with fury.
   
"Explain yourself."
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"Explain yourself. And concisely."
   
 
"It must have been the fountain water, Mistress. Why, it's so cold it could freeze fingers right off. I believe the elastic couldn't endure that."
 
"It must have been the fountain water, Mistress. Why, it's so cold it could freeze fingers right off. I believe the elastic couldn't endure that."
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Saito replied curtly.
 
Saito replied curtly.
   
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"So you're saying it's the elastic's fault?"
 
"So you're saying it's the elastic's fault?"
   
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Saito had his meals cut for three days.
 
Saito had his meals cut for three days.
 
   
 
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However, Saito remained completely fine for those three days. He'd just pretend to be withering and visit the kitchen behind the Hall of Alviss, where the energetic and lovely Siesta would serve him food like stew, and meat on the bone. He went there even when his meals weren't cut. The soup that Louise declared "The Widespread Blessing of Her Lady Queen" was never enough of a blessing to fill him up.
 
However, Saito remained completely fine for those three days. He'd just pretend to be withering and visit the kitchen behind the Hall of Alviss, where the energetic and lovely Siesta would serve him food like stew, and meat on the bone. He went there even when his meals weren't cut. The soup that Louise declared "The Widespread Blessing of Her Majesty, the Queen" was never enough of a blessing to fill him up.
 
   
 
Naturally, he kept his visits to the kitchen a secret from Louise. She was adamant about not giving him more until he had corrected his behavior, so there would be trouble if she found out about the meat and stew Siesta kindly provided him with. Louise would surely forbid him visiting for the sake of "educating" her familiar.
 
Naturally, he kept his visits to the kitchen a secret from Louise. She was adamant about not giving him more until he had corrected his behavior, so there would be trouble if she found out about the meat and stew Siesta kindly provided him with. Louise would surely forbid him visiting for the sake of "educating" her familiar.
   
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Currently though, she was totally unaware. In any case, Saito preferred Siesta and the kitchen a hundred times more than some Lady Queen and Founder Brimir he'd never met.
 
Currently though, she was totally unaware. In any case, Saito preferred Siesta and the kitchen a hundred times more than some Lady Queen and Founder Brimir he'd never met.
 
   
 
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One morning, after hungrily drinking down his soup in front of Louise, he went to the kitchen. Saito, having beaten the noble Guiche at the Vestri Courts, was hugely popular there.
 
One morning, after hungrily drinking down his soup in front of Louise, he went to the kitchen. Saito, having beaten the noble Guiche at the Vestri Courts, was hugely popular there.
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The one who called out was Marteau, the head chef, a well-rounded man well into his forties. <!-- <Cala> Should be Marteau-oyaji, but I'd hate to keep having to use that, or a shockingly inappropriate equivalent. --> Naturally, he was also a commoner himself, but with his position of head chef at the Academy, he earned as much as a lower class noble, a fact he could be proud of.
 
The one who called out was Marteau, the head chef, a well-rounded man well into his forties. <!-- <Cala> Should be Marteau-oyaji, but I'd hate to keep having to use that, or a shockingly inappropriate equivalent. --> Naturally, he was also a commoner himself, but with his position of head chef at the Academy, he earned as much as a lower class noble, a fact he could be proud of.
   
Dressed in simple but fine clothes, he commanded the kitchen with a wave and a flourish of his hand.
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Dressed in simple but fine clothes, he commanded the kitchen with a wave and flourish of his hand.
   
 
Despite his highly respectable position as head chef of a magic academy for nobles, Marteau wasn't the least bit arrogant, and surprisingly enough, disliked both magic and nobles.
 
Despite his highly respectable position as head chef of a magic academy for nobles, Marteau wasn't the least bit arrogant, and surprisingly enough, disliked both magic and nobles.
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"Thanks."
 
"Thanks."
   
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"Today's stew is extra special,"
 
"Today's stew is extra special,"
   
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"Wow, this is delicious! It's worlds apart from that gruel I get!"
 
"Wow, this is delicious! It's worlds apart from that gruel I get!"
   
At this, Marteau approached the table holding a kitchen knife in one hand.
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At this, Marteau approached the table holding a kitchen knife.
 
<!-- <the_naming_game> did anyone else get chills reading that? Don't compliment the stew or else...! -->
 
<!-- <the_naming_game> did anyone else get chills reading that? Don't compliment the stew or else...! -->
   
 
"Well of course. That stew's the same stuff we serve to the noble kids." <!-- <Cala> Trying to go for a speech style here... --><!-- <the_naming_game> "that there" might be overkill, but "stuff" and "noble kids" seems spot-on. -->
 
"Well of course. That stew's the same stuff we serve to the noble kids." <!-- <Cala> Trying to go for a speech style here... --><!-- <the_naming_game> "that there" might be overkill, but "stuff" and "noble kids" seems spot-on. -->
   
"I can't believe this is the kind of stuff they get to eat everyday…"
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"I can't believe this is the kind of stuff they get to eat everyday..."
   
 
Marteau snorted loudly at Saito's comment.
 
Marteau snorted loudly at Saito's comment.
   
"Hmph! Sure, they can use magic. Making pots and pans and castles from dirt, conjuring up unbelievable gems, even controlling dragons so what! But see, creating such exquisite dishes like this is a kind of magic itself. Wouldn't you agree, Saito?"
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"Hmph! Sure, they can use magic. Making pots and pans and castles from dirt, conjuring up unbelievable gems, even controlling dragons - so what! But see, creating such exquisite dishes like this is a kind of magic itself. Wouldn't you agree, Saito?"
   
 
Saito nodded.
 
Saito nodded.
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He put an arm around Saito's shoulders.
 
He put an arm around Saito's shoulders.
   
"Here, 'Our Sword!' Let me place a kiss upon your forehead! Come on! I insist!"
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"Here, "Our Sword"! Let me place a kiss upon your forehead! Come on! I insist!"
   
"I'd rather you not. And stop calling me that," Saito said. <!-- <the_naming_game> seems slightly less rude, but still informal. -->
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"Why not?"
 
"Why not?"
   
"It's just… weird."
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"It's just... weird."
   
 
The man let go of Saito and spread his arms out in protest.
 
The man let go of Saito and spread his arms out in protest.
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"This is what they call a true master! They never boast about their skill! Look and learn! A true master never boasts!"
 
"This is what they call a true master! They never boast about their skill! Look and learn! A true master never boasts!"
   
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The cooks chanted happily.
 
The cooks chanted happily.
   
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Then Marteau turned back around to face Saito.
 
Then Marteau turned back around to face Saito.
   
"You know, 'Our Sword,' I'm starting to like you more and more. So how about it?"
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"You know, "Our Sword," I'm starting to like you more and more. So how about it?"
   
"Um, how about what…?"
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"Um, how about what...?"
   
 
He was simply telling the truth, but Marteau always thought he was just being modest. It was somewhat frustrating. He felt like he was deceiving the good-natured man. Saito's gaze dropped down to the runes on his left hand.
 
He was simply telling the truth, but Marteau always thought he was just being modest. It was somewhat frustrating. He felt like he was deceiving the good-natured man. Saito's gaze dropped down to the runes on his left hand.
 
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''Since that day, it hasn't glowed anymore. Just what was that, I wonder…'' Even when Saito tried to make a point of staring at his own runes, Marteau interpreted that as him being reserved.
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''Since that day, it hasn't glowed anymore. Just what was that, I wonder...'' Even when Saito tried to make a point of staring at his own runes, Marteau interpreted that as him being reserved.
   
 
The chef turned to Siesta.
 
The chef turned to Siesta.
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"Bring our hero here some of Albion's finest."
 
"Bring our hero here some of Albion's finest."
   
Her smile widened, and retrieving a wine bottle of the requested vintage from the rack, she poured some into Saito's glass. Siesta looked on absorbedly as Saito's face grew redder and redder from the wine. These events repeated almost routinely:
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Her smile widened, and retrieving a wine bottle of the requested vintage from the rack,
 
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Saito visited the kitchen, Marteau became more attached to Saito, and Siesta's respect for him deepened even further.
 
   
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she poured some into Saito's glass. Siesta looked on absorbedly as Saito's face grew redder and redder from the wine. These events repeat almost routinely:
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Saito visits the kitchen, Marteau becomes more attached to Saito, and Siesta's respect for him deepens further.
   
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Although that particular day… there was a crimson shadow <!-- <Cala> Shadow, as in, someone following you. --> spying on Saito from a window of the kitchen. One of the young cooks took notice of it.
 
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Although that particular day... there was a crimson shadow <!-- <Cala> Shadow, as in, someone following you. --> spying on Saito from a window of the kitchen. One of the young cooks took notice of it.
   
 
"Hey, there's something outside the window."
 
"Hey, there's something outside the window."
   
 
The shadow gave a garbled 'kyuru kyuru' and slinked away.
 
The shadow gave a garbled 'kyuru kyuru' and slinked away.
 
   
 
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Then, after breakfast, cleaning, and laundry, he accompanies Louise in class. Originally, he was made to sit on the floor, but after Louise realized he had become rather transfixed with peering up other girls' skirts, she reluctantly let him sit on a chair. And she made it clear to Saito that should his vision ever stray too far from the blackboard, he would be denied lunch.
 
Then, after breakfast, cleaning, and laundry, he accompanied Louise to class. Originally, he was made to sit on the floor, but after Louise realized he had become rather transfixed with peering up other girls' skirts, she reluctantly let him sit on a chair. And she made it clear to Saito that should his vision ever stray too far from the blackboard, he would be denied lunch.
 
 
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In the beginning, the lessons fascinated Saito with their marvels: turning water into wine, combining various reagents to brew special potions, materializing fireballs out of nothing, levitating boxes and sticks and balls out of the class windows for their familiars to fetch, etc… but after a while, the novelty wore off.
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In the beginning, the lessons fascinated Saito with their marvels: turning water into wine, combining various reagents to brew special potions, materializing fireballs out of nothing, levitating boxes and sticks and balls
 
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out of the class windows for their familiars to fetch, etc... but after a while, the novelty wore off.
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And so he took to napping instead. The professor and Louise would give Saito evil looks every once in a while, but there were no rules forbidding familiars from sleeping during lessons. And just looking around the class, all the nocturnal familiars were snoozing away, even someone's owl. In fact, if they were to wake Saito up, it would mean that they were acknowledging him as a human. Louise chewed her lips from the overwhelming desire to give the sleeping Saito a piece of her mind, but she couldn't because doing so would mean contradicting herself about him being nothing more than a familiar.
 
And so he took to napping instead. The professor and Louise would give Saito evil looks every once in a while, but there were no rules forbidding familiars from sleeping during lessons. And just looking around the class, all the nocturnal familiars were snoozing away, even someone's owl. In fact, if they were to wake Saito up, it would mean that they were acknowledging him as a human. Louise chewed her lips from the overwhelming desire to give the sleeping Saito a piece of her mind, but she couldn't because doing so would mean contradicting herself about him being nothing more than a familiar.
 
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That same day, bathed in sunlight, Saito was fast asleep during another lesson.
 
That same day, bathed in sunlight, Saito was fast asleep during another lesson.
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''"What's wrong, Louise…?"''
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''"What's wrong, Louise...?"''
   
 
At hearing her name being called, Louise shot a glare at Saito.
 
At hearing her name being called, Louise shot a glare at Saito.
   
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''Oh, he's just muttering in his sleep,''
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Oh, he's just muttering in his sleep, she thought, and faced the front again.
   
she thought, and faced the front again.
 
 
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''"…Munya. H-hey, don't hug me all of a sudden."''
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''"...Munya. H-hey, don't hug me all of a sudden."''
   
 
Louise's gaze snapped to Saito once more. The other students were starting to take notice of the situation, and perked their ears to listen.
 
Louise's gaze snapped to Saito once more. The other students were starting to take notice of the situation, and perked their ears to listen.
   
''"…Jeez, for the slave driver you are during the day, you're such a sweet little thing in bed."''
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''"...Jeez, for the slave driver you are during the day, you're such a sweet little thing in bed."''
   
 
A trickle of drool ran down from the corner of Saito's mouth as he continued to enjoy his dream.
 
A trickle of drool ran down from the corner of Saito's mouth as he continued to enjoy his dream.
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"Wait! This is just some stupid sleep-talk! Ah, jeez! Wake up already!"
 
"Wait! This is just some stupid sleep-talk! Ah, jeez! Wake up already!"
   
''"Louise, Louise, you're like a kitten; stop licking me there like that…"''
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''"Louise, Louise, you're like a kitten; stop licking me there like that..."''
 
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"Since when have I ever snuck into your hay pile?!"
 
"Since when have I ever snuck into your hay pile?!"
   
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Louise crossed her arms and looked down imposingly on Saito.
 
Louise crossed her arms and looked down imposingly on Saito.
   
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Louise huffed haughtily, averting her gaze upwards.
 
Louise huffed haughtily, averting her gaze upwards.
   
"But, my dreams often come true," Saito piped up.
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"But, my dreams often come true."
   
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Saito piped up.
"Indeed! Dreams do have the power to foretell the future, after all!" someone in the room supplied in agreement.
 
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"Indeed! Dreams do have the power to foretell the future, after all!" Someone in the room supplied in agreement.
   
 
"My master here, with her personality, probably won't ever find herself a lover."
 
"My master here, with her personality, probably won't ever find herself a lover."
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A vast majority of the students nodded. Louise shot Saito another evil look, but it was too late. Saito was on a roll.
 
A vast majority of the students nodded. Louise shot Saito another evil look, but it was too late. Saito was on a roll.
   
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"My poor master gets quite 'frustrated' as a result, and instead resorts to slipping into this familiar's humble hay pile."
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"My poor master gets quite "frustrated" as a result, and instead resorts to slipping into this familiar's humble hay pile."
   
 
Louise put her hands on her hips and strongly reprimanded Saito.
 
Louise put her hands on her hips and strongly reprimanded Saito.
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That didn't stop Saito from continuing either.
 
That didn't stop Saito from continuing either.
   
"When she does, I have to fend her off a bit…"
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"When she does, I have to fend her off a bit..."
   
 
By this point, he was too far gone. Louise's shoulders began to tremble angrily.
 
By this point, he was too far gone. Louise's shoulders began to tremble angrily.
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"Hm?"
 
"Hm?"
   
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Noticing it, Saito waved his hand at it.
 
Noticing it, Saito waved his hand at it.
   
"You're Kirche's salamander, aren't you? I know you have a name. What was it… Oh yeah, it's Flame. Flame—"
+
"You're Kirche's salamander, aren't you? I know you have a name. What was it... Oh yeah, it's Flame. Flame-"
   
 
Saito motioned for it to come closer, but the salamander flicked its tail around and spat out a few embers before running back to its master.
 
Saito motioned for it to come closer, but the salamander flicked its tail around and spat out a few embers before running back to its master.
   
"Why would a lizard be so interested in me?" Saito tilted his head in puzzlement.
+
"Why would a lizard be so interested in me?"
   
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Saito tilted his head in puzzlement.
   
 
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And while Saito was having a staring contest with a salamander during class...
 
And while Saito was having a staring contest with a salamander during class…
 
   
 
At the Headmaster's Office, Miss Longueville the secretary was busily writing away at something.
 
At the Headmaster's Office, Miss Longueville the secretary was busily writing away at something.
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She stood up from her desk.
 
She stood up from her desk.
   
In a low voice, she murmured the incantation for a Spell of Tranquility. Dampening her footsteps so as not to wake Osmond, she crept out of the office.
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In a low voice, she murmured the incantation for a "Silence" spell. Dampening her footsteps so as not to wake Osmond, she crept out of the office.
   
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Her destination was the treasury, located on the floor directly below the Headmaster's Office.
 
Her destination was the treasury, located on the floor directly below the Headmaster's Office.
   
 
Stepping off the stairs, she confronted enormous iron doors. They were kept shut with a thick bolt mechanism, which in turn was secured with an equally large padlock.
 
Stepping off the stairs, she confronted enormous iron doors. They were kept shut with a thick bolt mechanism, which in turn was secured with an equally large padlock.
   
This place was where artifacts dating from even before the Academy's establishment were contained. After cautiously surveying her surroundings, Miss Longueville withdrew her wand from a pocket. It was about the length of a pencil, but with a flick of the wrist, it extended to the length of an conductor's baton, which she whirled expertly.
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This place was where artifacts dating even before the Academy's establishment were contained. After cautiously surveying her surroundings, Miss Longueville withdrew her wand from a pocket. It was about the length of a pencil, but with a flick of the wrist, it extended to the length of an conductor's baton, which she whirled expertly.
   
 
Miss Longueville cast another spell.
 
Miss Longueville cast another spell.
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Once the invocation was complete, she pointed the baton at the padlock.
 
Once the invocation was complete, she pointed the baton at the padlock.
   
However… nothing happened.
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However... nothing happened.
   
"Well, it's not like I really expected a Spell of Unbinding to work anyway."
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"Well, it's not like I really expected an "Unlock" spell to work anyway."
   
 
Smiling deviously, she began reciting the words to one of her specialty spells.
 
Smiling deviously, she began reciting the words to one of her specialty spells.
   
It was a Transmutation spell. Chanting loud and clear, she waved her baton at the heavy lock. The magic cascaded over it… but even after a considerable wait, there was no visible change.
+
It was a Transmutation spell. Chanting loud and clear, she waved her baton at the heavy lock. The magic cascaded over it... but even after a considerable wait, there was no visible change.
   
 
"Looks like it's been magically reinforced by a Square-class mage," she muttered.
 
"Looks like it's been magically reinforced by a Square-class mage," she muttered.
 
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A Spell of Reinforcement was one that prevented the oxidation and decomposition of matter. Any substance that had this spell cast on it was protected from any chemical reactions, and allowed it to be preserved forever in that state. Even transmutation magic would have no effect against something protected like this. Only if one's magical skill surpassed that of the mage who cast the spell could it be overcome.
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A "Reinforcement" spell was one that prevented the oxidation and decomposition of matter. Any substance that had this spell cast on it was protected from any chemical reactions, and allowed it to be preserved
   
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forever in that state. Even transmutation magic would have no effect against something protected like this. Only if one's magical skill surpassed that of the mage who cast the reinforcement could the spell be overcome.
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As it was, the mage who had enchanted this door was apparently an extremely powerful mage, considering that not even Miss Longueville, an expert in Earth magic and transmutation in particular, was able to affect the door.
 
As it was, the mage who had enchanted this door was apparently an extremely powerful mage, considering that not even Miss Longueville, an expert in Earth magic and transmutation in particular, was able to affect the door.
   
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"Greetings, Miss Longueville. What are you doing here?"
 
"Greetings, Miss Longueville. What are you doing here?"
   
"Mister Colbert, I was going to catalog the contents of the treasury, but…"
+
"Mister Colbert, I was going to catalog the contents of the treasury, but..."
   
"Oh, that's quite some work. It'd probably take you all day to go over each and every item. There's a lot of junk mixed together with them, and it's a rather cramped space they've been arranged in too." <!-- <Shadow Walker13> "arranged in, too" or "arranged into"? -->
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"Oh, that's quite some work. It'd probably take you all day to go over each and every item. There's a lot of junk mixed together with them, and it's a rather cramped space they've been arranged in too."
   
 
"Indeed."
 
"Indeed."
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The woman smiled.
 
The woman smiled.
   
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"Well… I didn't want to disturb his sleep. In any case, I'm in no immediate hurry to complete the catalog…"
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"Well... I didn't want to disturb his sleep. In any case, I'm in no immediate hurry to complete the catalog..."
   
 
"I see. Sleep, you say. That old man, I mean, Old Osmond, is quite a deep sleeper. It seems I shall have to visit him another time."
 
"I see. Sleep, you say. That old man, I mean, Old Osmond, is quite a deep sleeper. It seems I shall have to visit him another time."
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"Err… Miss Longueville?"
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"Err... Miss Longueville?"
   
 
"Is something the matter?"
 
"Is something the matter?"
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Colbert looked slightly embarrassed as he opened his mouth to speak.
 
Colbert looked slightly embarrassed as he opened his mouth to speak.
   
"If it would be all right, how would you like to, say… join me for lunch?"
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"If it would be alright, how would you like to, say... join me for lunch?"
   
 
She took a moment to consider, then smiled brightly as she accepted the offer.
 
She took a moment to consider, then smiled brightly as she accepted the offer.
   
"Sure, it would be my pleasure."
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"Sure, it'd be my pleasure."
   
 
The two of them headed down the stairs.
 
The two of them headed down the stairs.
   
"Hey, Mister Colbert." In slightly informal tones, Miss Longueville struck up conversation again.
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"Hey, Mister Colbert."
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In slightly informal tones, Miss Longueville struck up conversation again.
   
 
"Y-yes? What is it?"
 
"Y-yes? What is it?"
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Emboldened by how easily his invitation had been taken up, Colbert responded quite eagerly to her.
 
Emboldened by how easily his invitation had been taken up, Colbert responded quite eagerly to her.
   
"Is anything important actually inside the treasury?"
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"Is anything actually inside the treasury?"
   
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"There is."
   
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Her eyes glinted.
 
Her eyes glinted.
   
"What… kind of shape?"
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"What... kind of shape?"
   
"It's extremely difficult to describe, except as simply strange, yes. But never mind that, what would you like to eat? Today's menu is flounder baked in herbs… but I'm quite well-acquainted with Marteau the head chef, and I can have him make any of the world's finest delica—"
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"It's extremely difficult to describe, except as simply strange, yes. But never mind that, what would you like to eat? Today's menu is flounder baked in herbs... but I'm quite well-acquainted with Marteau the head chef, and I can have him make any of the world's finest delica--"
   
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"Ahem."
"Ahem." Miss Longueville interrupted Colbert's babbling.
 
 
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Miss Longueville interrupted Colbert's babbling.
   
 
"Y-yes?"
 
"Y-yes?"
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She regarded him with a comfortable expression.
 
She regarded him with a comfortable expression.
   
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"Eh? Well… Haha, I just happened to come across a lot of documents pertaining to this floor, that's all… I like to consider it a part of my research, haha. Thanks to that, I'm still single at this age… yes."
 
   
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"Eh? Well... Haha, I just happened to come across a lot of documents pertaining to this floor, that's all... I like to consider it a part of my research, haha. Thanks to that, I'm still single at this age... yes."
"I'm sure the woman that you find will be very happy to be with you. After all, you can teach her so much about things that nobody else knows…" Miss Longueville fixed him with a fascinated look.
 
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"I'm sure the woman that you find will be very happy to be with you. After all, you can teach her so much about things that nobody else knows..."
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Miss Longueville fixed him with a fascinated look.
   
 
"Oh, no! Please don't tease me like that!"
 
"Oh, no! Please don't tease me like that!"
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Colbert flustered nervously as he wiped sweat from his balding forehead. Then, regaining composure, he faced her seriously.
 
Colbert flustered nervously as he wiped sweat from his balding forehead. Then, regaining composure, he faced her seriously.
   
"Miss Longueville. Have you heard of the Ball of Frigg<ref>In Norse mythology, [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Frigg Frigg] (Eddas) or Frigga (Gesta Danorum) was said to be "foremost among the goddesses," the wife of Odin, queen of the Æsir, and goddess of the sky.</ref> that is being held on the day of Yule?" <!-- <Cala> Frigg, a Norse goddess. Wiki it. -->
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"Miss Longueville. Have you heard of the Ball of <span id="back_to_frigg">[[#frigg|Frigg]]</span> that is being held on the day of Yule?" <!-- <Cala> Frigg, a Norse goddess. Wiki it. -->
   
 
"No, I haven't."
 
"No, I haven't."
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Smiling, she pressed him to continue.
 
Smiling, she pressed him to continue.
   
"So… if it would be all right, I was wondering if you would dance with me, yes."
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"So... if it would be alright, I was wondering if you would dance with me, yes."
   
"I would love to. While ball parties are fabulous, I'd like to know more about the treasury right now. I'm quite fascinated by magical items, you see."
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"I would love to. While ball parties are fabulous, I'd like to know more about the treasury right now. I'm
   
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Wanting to further impress Miss Longueville, Colbert racked his brains. ''Treasury, treasury, she says…''
 
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quite fascinated by magical items, you see."
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Wanting to further impress Miss Longueville, Colbert racked his brains. ''Treasury, treasury, she says...''
   
 
Remembering something she might find interesting, he put on an important air and started to talk.
 
Remembering something she might find interesting, he put on an important air and started to talk.
   
"Ah yes, there's one thing I can tell you. Although it's not particularly important…"
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"Ah yes, there's one thing I can tell you. Although it's not particularly important..."
   
 
"By all means, do tell."
 
"By all means, do tell."
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"Oh, that's intriguing."
 
"Oh, that's intriguing."
   
"That weakness is… physical force."
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"That weakness is... physical force."
   
 
"Physical force?"
 
"Physical force?"
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"That was most intriguing indeed, Mister Colbert."
 
"That was most intriguing indeed, Mister Colbert."
   
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