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I wonder if Daiya is smarter than Maria? And even if he is, Maria has the advantage of over 70 years of experience... |
I wonder if Daiya is smarter than Maria? And even if he is, Maria has the advantage of over 70 years of experience... |
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[[User:Liardiary|Liardiary]] 22:44, 21 April 2010 (UTC)Liardiary |
[[User:Liardiary|Liardiary]] 22:44, 21 April 2010 (UTC)Liardiary |
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| − | smarter or not, i'm sure he will become a formidable opponent if he really wanted to... and it will be more interesting if Daiya had received the Box from before the Rejecting Class... hehehe |
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| − | I wonder if Kazuki will obtain a box later on... |
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| − | What kind of box would Kazuki obtain? box of everyday living? O.O I think that would contradict his entire being somewhat... |
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| − | hmm... i don't think he will ever receive the box even if it's emergency |
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| − | I don't know about that... He did betray Maria, even if for a little while. So, he might be tempted... [[User:Liardiary|Liardiary]] 11:48, 22 April 2010 (UTC)Liardiary |
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| − | And the sentence about the girl made me Intrigued. |
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| − | Maybe that girl links Kazuki to the box? |
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| − | ........ i really want to see that Gothloli Maria..... orz |
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| − | :[http://www.baka-tsuki.org/project/index.php?title=Image:UtsuroNoHako3_3.jpg] - well, admittedly it doesn't look too Gothloli-ish. :D [[User:EusthEnoptEron|EusthEnoptEron]] 07:38, 24 April 2010 (UTC) |
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| − | o_O today's lesson : check the illustration page OFTEN<br> |
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| − | thank you eusth! XD<br> |
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| − | "admittedly it doesn't look too Gothloli-ish." << that's where a fan-art worth it :3 |
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| − | == Rather massive editing by Kadi == |
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| − | Just now, I just did some rather massive editing on this, frequently changing sentence structure and words. Somewhere I read that I should open a section on the Talk-page when I do this, so here it is. In many cases I tried to improve the flow of the text, make it more succinct or further strengthen the mood I felt. Apart from correcting slight grammatical errors and things like that. Any feedback? Did I succeed at my attempts? Did I make it worse? Where? Was I too disrespectful towards the translator (which was in now way intended)?--[[User:Kadi|Kadi]] 15:13, 24 April 2010 (UTC) |
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| − | :Looks fine, thanks! :D Don't worry about being [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Be_bold too bold] when editing, though. If something seems awkward to you, just edit it (also helps me to improve my English). I look over most of the edits, so if you change something for the worse, I'll fix it. [[User:EusthEnoptEron|EusthEnoptEron]] 23:10, 24 April 2010 (UTC) |
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| − | == Down-to-earth == |
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| − | Down-to-earth means pragmatic. If one is down-to-earth, he is realistic. Also, it should be hyphenated. I think I see what you mean but down-to-earth just doesn't sound quite right in this case. Did Maria mean that gothic lolitas were just a fantasy? Or unreal like a fairytale? [[User:MatrixM|MatrixM]] ([[User talk:MatrixM|talk]]) 11:04, 15 July 2013 (CDT) |
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