Pui Pui Manga Translation

[Vaelis]

It's to improve the "English" and not the translation.

For example page 114: “What kind of eyes are those you are having…”
I don't think it sounds really good but I don't know how to reformulate it.
But perhaps it's just me and it sounds ok.

[Assassin]

For example page 114: “What kind of eyes are those you are having…”
I don't think it sounds really good but I don't know how to reformulate it.
But perhaps it's just me and it sounds ok.

Perhaps:

"What kind of those eyes are you having..." no wait, that sounds even weird.

... or can this fit? "What kind of eyes do you have..."

Just a suggestion though.

[ShadowZeroHeart]

About this... First I would state the scenario... The thing is, Sierra heard about the possibility of a treasure, which would be worth a lot, and her eyes became $ signs.

The best translation I can come up with is "What kind of eyes are those..."
or
"What are those eyes..."

But the literal meaning is changed slightly, so I gave a not so good translation in that sense ^^"

[Assassin]

Oh, that. Now I get it. (... next time I'd better brave myself to take the raws and see if I can do anything about them).

If that's the case then the lines could be one of these I suppose...

"What's up with these eyes (you're showing me)..."

note that the words in brackets would be optional, I am not sure whether to add it or not.

Just an idea.

[Krikit]

"What's with your eyes..."

"What's with those eyes..."

??

[Assassin]

Just saw the original text.

"Nan da sono me..."

to me, that roughly goes as "What's with these/those eyes..."

... now I'm confused between "these" and "those". >_<

EDIT: I erased the "up" in the sentence.

[Vaelis]

Niminy
Piminy
[actual text 扭扭捏捏, I cant think of a better phrase than Niminy Piminy]

Any suggestion for the sfx?

[Trabius]

Niminy
Piminy
[actual text 扭扭捏捏, I cant think of a better phrase than Niminy Piminy]

Any suggestion for the sfx?

If it helps, あたふた is an adverb meaning to be in a rush. The only thing is, I wonder why it would be left-right instead of right-left. I don't think ふたあた means anything, does it?

[Edit] I don't know Chinese, but I looked 扭扭捏捏 up and got this definition:
[sissy : unbecoming of a macho man : unmanly]

Just based on the kanji, maybe "Twist, shake"?

[Vaelis]

I checked my sfx dictionary and I have
あたふた: Atafuta -> *panic panic* (moving busily)



In page 125:
For きゃぴ きゃぴ, I have in my sfx dictionary Kyapi kyapi -> *girlish giggle*
Is it ok?

[Trabius]

I checked my sfx dictionnary and I have
あたふた: Atafuta -> *panic panic* (moving busily)

That sounds right to me, though I can't really tell if it fits the panel without more context. Maybe it's just me, but she doesn't look especially worried.

In page 125:
For きゃぴ きゃぴ, I have in my sfx dictionnary Kyapi kyapi -> *girlish giggle*
Is it ok?

I think that's how I usually see it, but kyapi kyapi can just mean extra spirited/youthful vigor.

[Vaelis]

Page 122-123:

Spoiler! :

[Trabius]

Ah, ok then. Panic does make sense in that case, just not the kind I was thinking of.

[TheGiftedMonkey]

I just found it to be too much of an eyesore.

[jupiter_ringsid]

Hmmm, just a little bit of a question about the translation on page 122-123 (haven't check the wiki page for the complete translation script)
why "Jyama datta kara yo, ii koto?" was translated to “I just found it (to be) too much of an eyesore!” and "nande ikinari TENSION MAX de okorunda" to “Why are you throwing your temper around so agitatedly?” ?
The first one I think is more like "Because it was in the way, do you understand?" and the 2nd "Why do you suddenly become so angry?"

[Vaelis]

The translation was done using the chinese raws.