why not "Kaze no Stigma"?

[Jumpyshoes]

I see what your saying. I'll try to fix it before I go to bed.

[erehwon]

np, take your time. g'nite

[Jumpyshoes]

By the time the shredded remains of the three people were discovered, it was already dawn. This serious situation certainly shocked the entire Kannagi clan.

Faster than human reflexes, the 3 defensively alert people were killed without anyone being alerted.

Big changes . . . . People on the IRC helped. See if it still works.


Edit: Looks oversimplified to me.

By the time the shredded remains of the three people were discovered, it was already dawn. This unbelievably serious situation completely shocked the entire Kannagi clan.

The Kannagi clan was astonished. This is an undeniable fact. Faster than human reflexes, the 3 defensively alert people were killed without anyone being alerted.

[erehwon]

Sound pretty good to me. Sounds English. The other sounds like chinese just written in english words.

Maybe [The Kannagi clan was astonished. This is an undeniable fact.] use a e semicolon [The Kannagi clan was astonished; this is an undeniable fact.] Bring the sentences together since I think they are connected.

[Jumpyshoes]

Ok I'll use this.

By the time the shredded remains of the three people were discovered, it was already dawn. This unbelievably serious situation completely shocked the entire Kannagi clan.

The Kannagi clan was astonished; this is an undeniable fact. Faster than human reflexes, the 3 defensively alert people were killed without anyone being alerted.