1.3 Counting
Within ten seconds, various things happen...
One second. Louise notices Siesta who was pushed onto the bed by Saito. Two seconds. Louise notices that her blouse is undone. Three seconds. Saito and Siesta stand up flustered. Six seconds. Siesta had done up the buttons on her blouse. Seven seconds. She Siesta dashed out of the room, facing away from Louise. Eight seconds. Saito cries, “Wait Siesta!” Nine seconds. Louise regains herself. Ten seconds. Just as Saito was about to explain what had happened, he felt an intense pain as Louise high kicked him.
My revision First second: Louise notices that Siesta was pushed onto the bed by Saito. Second second: Louise notices that her blouse is undone. Third second: Saito and Siesta stand up flustered. Sixth second: Siesta buttons up her blouse. Seventh second: Siesta dashes out of the room, facing away from Louise. Eighth second: Saito cries, “Wait Siesta!” Nineth second: Louise regains herself. Tenth second: Just as Saito is about to explain what had happened, he feet an intense pain as Louise high kicks him.
Perhaps it would be better to omit the "Second(s)" and just write it as one: two: three:
etc.
--Delwack 11:33, 16 November 2007 (PST)
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