Rednal's Proofreading Record

Rednal · Post by **Rednal** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 6:52 pm

Hello, everyone. ^^ I'm Rednal, a new proofreader for the ZnT novel at the request of my boss at Kawaii Heavens, Se-chan. I thought it would be good to make a record of changes I've made, in case anybody has a disagreement. I forgot to write it up for Chapter 1, but from here on out, watch this thread if you have a vested interest.

...Also, I didn't feel like cluttering up the Wiki page, especially because I haven't done much high-level wiki work anywhere. >.< I'm working on that, though!

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Chapter 02:

Page 52:
--Changed "Is this a Salamander?" to "Is that a Salamander?".
--Reason: It sounds better.

Page 54:
--Added "stand for?" to "...Okay, okay. By the way, she just called you 'Louise the Zero', but what's the 'Zero?', and removed the question mark after "Zero".
--Reason: Same as above; it sounds better.

Page 61:
--Debated change: Shouldn't we be calling her hair pink? -.- *Indicates both Anime and Front Cover*

Page 64:
--Changed "She then whispered a rune, and they began to glow brightly." to "She then whispered a spell, and they began to glow brightly."
--Reason: Technically, you can't whisper a rune. A rune is a symbol, like the ones on Saito's hand. They have names, but... proper English doesn't allow for whispering a "rune". Whispering a "spell" seems to fit better.

Jumpyshoes · Post by **Jumpyshoes** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 6:59 pm

First of all, you made 2 threads. Second, you don't need to put the thread here. If people don't like it, they'll change it. Finally, everything looks good.

Rednal · Post by **Rednal** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 7:18 pm

Second thread deleted; dang slow internet.

^^ I know I don't really need the thread, but after considering onizuka-gto's words when I was getting my instructions, I thought it would be best. Makes it easier on all of us, yes?

onizuka-gto · Post by **onizuka-gto** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 7:20 pm

ah thanks for the report rednal,

and pay no attention to Jumpyshoe, s/he just as new here as you are and is determine to shift all "nubcake" ribbing to the next new person.

still not working, if i have to judge by the "Torture Jumpshoe" thread.

anyway, i assume the other thread was a mistake and i'll go clean that up.

once again thanks for your help

Jumpyshoes · Post by **Jumpyshoes** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 7:29 pm

onizuka-gto wrote:and pay no attention to Jumpyshoe, s/he just as new here as you are and is determine to shift all "nubcake" ribbing to the next new person.

First of all, I'm a guy. Well, I have no real response to that other comment. So let me state this again. I'M A poking GUY!!! DAMN IT!! WHY DO PEOPLE ONLINE AND IRL THINK I'M NOT A GUY!!!

obaka-san · Post by **obaka-san** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 9:55 pm

tsk tsk
calm down calm down Shoesy. it's not like we DON'T think that you are a BOY, but rather, to make sure, and prepare for whatever happen in the future, we call you s/he. what's wrong with that? there's a "he" right?

TheGiftedMonkey · Post by **TheGiftedMonkey** » Sun Jun 10, 2007 10:59 pm

I don't treat Shoes as a him, much less a her. I like IT... IT works nicely for me...

Christof · Post by **Christof** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 12:58 am

Don't be so hard on him.... Lol

onizuka-gto · Post by **onizuka-gto** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 5:18 am

well at lease seth is happy, i swear he had it just as bad being the previous "nubcake"

its not like we do it intentionally, not all new people become nubcakes, its just a case of shouting out "oi! you! Nubcake!" and someone always seem to stand up and say "who? me?"

well, that's what it seems like....

Anyay back on topic, who's dong chapter 7 right now? i forgot.

was it claies? i hope s/he is doing ok, miht have to p.m. him/her....

Post by **HolyCow** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 5:32 am

Sethy was demoted from Nubcakes to Nubsauce once...

Rednal · Post by **Rednal** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 9:40 am

*Sweatdrops* Interesting. I expected nothing less, of course, but...

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Chapter 3:

Page 78:
--Changed "Just remember, ojousama." to "Just remember, my lady."
--Reason: I am under the impression, from what I've read so far, that we are avoiding Japanese honorifics.

--Deleted "just" and from "While the meager soup and bread he got served was still painful to behold, it was a pretty even trade-off for getting to laugh so much just earlier."
--Reason: It sounds better.

Page 80:
--Added a comma between "commoner and "just" in "I'm a commoner just like you."
--Reason: It sounded to me like there would be a pause.

Page 82:
--Changed "Noble schmoble." to "Noble schnoble."
--Reason: It flows better.

Page 100:
--Changed "I will not lower my head. I cannot!" to "I will not bow to anyone against my will!"
--Reason: It sounds more natural.

Page 103:
--Deleted "so" from "That's so strange."
--Reason: It flows better.

Page 112:
--Changed "Louise herself was sitting at a table and sleeping soundly over it." to "Louise herself was sitting at a table and sleeping soundly with her head on it."
--Reason: I felt that it sounded better.

Page 115:
--Deleted the comma from "But, I'm not so scared anymore!"
--Reason: A "comma" type pause seemed unlikely. An ellipse, maybe. Removing the pause makes her sound eager, though, which seems most likely to be right.

Jumpyshoes · Post by **Jumpyshoes** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 10:58 am

Wow . . . Dedication. I couldn't edit that much or I would cry . . . . And I'm a guy . . .

Ah yes, on a completely unrelated note, just to amaze and amuse you all, I've been accused of being/been called: Idiot, Stupid, Retarded, Dumb (the last 4 are NOT true by the way), Jerk, Bi, Gay, Transexual, Transvestite, Cross-dresser, Annoying, and Wierd . . . There's more, but non come to mind at the moment . . . .

Rednal · Post by **Rednal** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 11:15 am

...? That was minor editing; the chapters have been mostly cleaned already. I'm given to understand that Chapters 4+ are the ones that really need somebody to go through and standardize things.

...Besides, haven't most Otaku been called those names? I mean, as long as you haven't actually crossplayed...

Jumpyshoes · Post by **Jumpyshoes** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 11:27 am

What I meant was spending the effort to read 20+ pages of text and spot out all the errors/stuff that sounds wierd. When I read, I want to read something already edited. Looking for errors is hard . . . . And no, I haven't crossplayed . . . .

Rednal · Post by **Rednal** » Mon Jun 11, 2007 11:32 am

Well, somebody has to do it. I just read very quickly, so it's not a problem for me to proofread and look for errors. And visualizing the format to check it for errors is pretty easy, too... ^^ I guess it's just something you learn over time.

I got bored one day of sitting on the sidelines of scanlation, so I decided I might as well join the effort. ^^ It's actually kind of fun when my name appears on a credits page for something KH releases. I get satisfaction from it.