OLN: The Devil's Spice
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OLN: The Devil's Spice
Akuma no Koumiryou or The Devil’s Spice is an original light novel written and illustrated by Kanda Hikaru and edited by Kyle Tolray.
Genre:
Action, Comedy, Tragedy, Psychological, Cyberpunk, Quasi-Harem
Story Synopsis:
What does it mean to be fair?
Ageha, chef by day and cyborg assassin by night, kills to confirm his answer to that question.
After taking out one of the richest and most powerful men in Japan, he finds Kaika, the victim’s prodigy daughter, seeking him out, not for revenge, but for her own dangerous ambitions.
The deceptive and mischievous teen offers the young man a deal he cannot refuse.
Ageha needs to juggle restaurant kitchen politics, his own bloodlust, and his new moonlighting job.
Kaika has her hands full orchestrating corporate backchanneling while trying to keep a leash on her incredibly capable, perhaps too capable, new employee.
With life and death on the line, the dubious alliance between these two broken individuals leads to-
*BANG*
“Don’t spoil the meal! We haven’t even served the first course!”
Foreword:
I am a big fan of light novels, and after having read through numerous titles and volumes, I have finally decided to write one myself. I also serve as the illustrator for this work. This light novel is edited by my reader turned editor, Kyle Tolray. It is hosted on my wordpress blog.
I am a frequent user of Baka-Tsuki though mostly as a lurker. This site has introduced the light novel medium, if it should be categorized as that, to me. Light novels have become one of my favorite forms of entertainment, so I wanted to express my gratitude by doing something to contribute to the online light novel community. I hope you enjoy my first attempt at writing at such length.
Volume 1: The Devil's Spice - Wordpress / PDF / Wattpad
Chapter One: A Splash of Red
Chapter Two: Oil and Acid
Chapter Three: Emulsion
Chapter Four: Resting
Chapter Five: Blanched
Chapter Six: Breakage
Chapter Seven: Best Served Cold
Chapter Eight: Ripening
Chapter Nine: Merenda
Chapter Ten: Salt and Pepper
Chapter Eleven: Defrost
Chapter Twelve: Unveiling
Chapter Thirteen: Marination
Chapter Fourteen: Flash Freeze
Chapter Fifteen: Boiling Point
Epilogue
Illustrations -Possible Spoilers-
Definition of Terms
Volume 2: Winter Storm - Wordpress
Chapter One: Cenacolo
Chapter Two: Late Night Delivery
Chapter Three: Squall
Chapter Four: Tenderized
Chapter Five: Secret Ingredient
Chapter Six: The Two Fishes
Chapter Seven: Substitution
Chapter Eight: Taking Orders
Afterword:
Special thanks go to Kyle Tolray for doing a fantastic job editing this light novel. I have learned many things from your work, and I hope I can apply them to the following volumes.
Gratitude goes to my pilot reader who has contributed greatly to the story content by sharing his ideas. He also pointed out parts that are too cryptic, an issue that I have struggled with in my writing. This story is far easier to understand because of his help. His impressions on the illustrations also prevented me from publishing physically abnormal characters.
Many thanks go to the readers who have actually completed the novel. Your comments and insights are greatly appreciated. Know that I consider all of your input when writing the continuation of this story.
Note: (not edited out to preserve the flow of the first few posts)
One of my goals in writing this light novel is for it to be placed in the Original Light Novels section on the front page of the Baka-Tsuki website. I am not sure what it takes to be hosted there, so it would be greatly appreciated if someone could inform me if there are certain requirements.
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Re: OLN: The Devil's Spice
You need nothing in particular in order for your story to get hosted here; except that you must attempt to gain popularity here which is--in my own experience, better said than done.
Anyway, I am looking forward to your work!
Anyway, I am looking forward to your work!
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Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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Thanks for the information! I am glad that you are planning to read my work. I spent a lot of time on the edits, rewrites, and illustrations, but having actual readers makes me feel that the effort was definitely worth it.
The chapter links are below. I think they would be easier to access this way.
Chapter One: A Splash of Red
Chapter Two: Oil and Acid
Chapter Three: Emulsion
Chapter Four: Resting
Chapter Five: Blanched
Chapter Six: Breakage
Chapter Seven: Best Served Cold
Chapter Eight: Ripening
Chapter Nine: Merenda
Chapter Ten: Salt and Pepper
Chapter Eleven: Defrost
Chapter Twelve: Unveiling
Chapter Thirteen: Marination
Chapter Fourteen: Flash Freeze
Chapter Fifteen: Boiling Point
Epilogue
The chapter links are below. I think they would be easier to access this way.
Chapter One: A Splash of Red
Chapter Two: Oil and Acid
Chapter Three: Emulsion
Chapter Four: Resting
Chapter Five: Blanched
Chapter Six: Breakage
Chapter Seven: Best Served Cold
Chapter Eight: Ripening
Chapter Nine: Merenda
Chapter Ten: Salt and Pepper
Chapter Eleven: Defrost
Chapter Twelve: Unveiling
Chapter Thirteen: Marination
Chapter Fourteen: Flash Freeze
Chapter Fifteen: Boiling Point
Epilogue
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Interesting concept! I've read chapter 1-6 so far and I am liking it. It seems there are also illustrations per chapter too.
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It is a nice thing to give tons of effort for your story to become productive. It also reflects to the writer him/herself that he/she is serious to his/her stuff. To be honest, that is one of the assets most of the story writers lack causing them to drop their story. I hope that your story would reach your desirable end.
On a sidenote--I just read the Chapter 1 in front of the PC and somehow, what picked my interest here the most is Kaika herself, as if she is hiding numerous motives behind everything around her.
Great way of opening the curtains to your story.
I'll just make a .txt file of it so I can read it through my phone.
On a sidenote--I just read the Chapter 1 in front of the PC and somehow, what picked my interest here the most is Kaika herself, as if she is hiding numerous motives behind everything around her.
Great way of opening the curtains to your story.
I'll just make a .txt file of it so I can read it through my phone.
Writer of Tales of Mysidia : Paradox Heroes.
If you have extra time, kindly go for my thread and have a taste of my story. Any comments are welcome.
Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
If you have extra time, kindly go for my thread and have a taste of my story. Any comments are welcome.
Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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@gamerbaki -
I am happy that you seem to have enjoyed it. Yes, Kaika is indeed the mysterious character in the story, and fortunately, that was delivered properly.
When I wrote the first chapter, it was nothing like the current version. I had to rewrite most of it several times because I learned better grammar as I wrote the story. Chapter 1, losing more than 1000 words, changed the most drastically. A friend of mine who reviewed the first draft said that I was trying too hard to fit in too much information in the first chapter, whose purpose is to attract the readers and invite them to continue the story. I used to write short stories but did not have experience writing longer narratives, so I probably defaulted to that style.
On a side note, will you be able to view the illustrations if you convert the chapters to txt file?
I am happy that you seem to have enjoyed it. Yes, Kaika is indeed the mysterious character in the story, and fortunately, that was delivered properly.
When I wrote the first chapter, it was nothing like the current version. I had to rewrite most of it several times because I learned better grammar as I wrote the story. Chapter 1, losing more than 1000 words, changed the most drastically. A friend of mine who reviewed the first draft said that I was trying too hard to fit in too much information in the first chapter, whose purpose is to attract the readers and invite them to continue the story. I used to write short stories but did not have experience writing longer narratives, so I probably defaulted to that style.
On a side note, will you be able to view the illustrations if you convert the chapters to txt file?
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Correction, not all chapters have illustration . I really like Saya's art.
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Nope, because I care for the text more than the illustrations.
Anyway, illustrations can actually add appeal to the story
(I still wish that I can draw well)
Anyway, illustrations can actually add appeal to the story
(I still wish that I can draw well)
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If you have extra time, kindly go for my thread and have a taste of my story. Any comments are welcome.
Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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@gamerbaki - I see. I think part of what makes a light novel what it is are the illustrations. Some scenes just have more impact with some visual assistance. It also helps because it shows the character design. Facial descriptions never go into detail in LNs because of that. Well, excluding the hair, anime characters of a certain art style tend to look similar anyway.
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Was searching the net yesterday for LNs to read and found this thread. The cover artwork looks interesting. Will update further as I read the chapters.
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Thanks for the comment! I would appreciate any thoughts about the novel, so feel free to give your comments and/or criticisms.
I am glad you liked the cover page. There are several more illustrations in the book, which I hope serves as an incentive for you to continue reading. They were drawn partly for that purpose, after all.
I am currently doing the outline for volume 2, so any suggestions for that is welcome as well.
I am glad you liked the cover page. There are several more illustrations in the book, which I hope serves as an incentive for you to continue reading. They were drawn partly for that purpose, after all.
I am currently doing the outline for volume 2, so any suggestions for that is welcome as well.
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I have finished reading it. Aside from the action I've enjoyed the discussion especially the comedy and teasing regarding Saya. The chemistry between the characters are well balanced, you mix it up with good fighting which I very much like,
I wanna discuss it but it will be hard not to spoil. Any plans for book 2? I'm definitely looking forward to it.
I wanna discuss it but it will be hard not to spoil. Any plans for book 2? I'm definitely looking forward to it.
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Yo!
I already finished reading your LN.
Looking on the technical side of the story; the grammar is fine. The sentence construction is good as well. The way how you organize the events as well as their thoughts are good as well. The selection of words are well-balanced although I admit that there are some words that I fail to comprehend easily (maybe because you use some words that are usually used in a literary piece which made sense for you who had written numerous short stories). Throughout the entire story, it is a smooth-read as well as has a smooth flow of events.
Now, for the personal side:
Well, that's all I can say for now for the story.
I'm sure that Kaika still has something on her sleeves knowing that she did not fulfill her objective yet.
I can only say a generic advice to you:
Hope you read Tales of Mysidia as well. I am constantly updating the story whose events are already done some time ago. You can check my thread if you have extra time as well.
I look forward to the next installment of the story
--gamerbaki
I already finished reading your LN.
Looking on the technical side of the story; the grammar is fine. The sentence construction is good as well. The way how you organize the events as well as their thoughts are good as well. The selection of words are well-balanced although I admit that there are some words that I fail to comprehend easily (maybe because you use some words that are usually used in a literary piece which made sense for you who had written numerous short stories). Throughout the entire story, it is a smooth-read as well as has a smooth flow of events.
Now, for the personal side:
Spoiler! :
I'm sure that Kaika still has something on her sleeves knowing that she did not fulfill her objective yet.
I can only say a generic advice to you:
Spoiler! :
I look forward to the next installment of the story
--gamerbaki
Writer of Tales of Mysidia : Paradox Heroes.
If you have extra time, kindly go for my thread and have a taste of my story. Any comments are welcome.
Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V
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Thanks for the awesome review! It is quite comprehensive and gave me a lot of insights on how the characters are viewed by the readers. I am happy that the writing style and structure did not turn you off. I realize that ease of reading is one of the selling points of light novels, but I still wanted to add some flair to the text. Some of the banter and wordplay might be lost on some, but that is fine because those are short bonuses anyway. I think it is okay if the readers think that the characters are just pedantic jerks who prattle or keep beating around the bush because that is practically what they are doing sometimes (lol).
Now for the personal comments:
And about your advice:
Now for the personal comments:
Spoiler! :
Spoiler! :
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Kanda Hikaru wrote:Thanks for the awesome review! It is quite comprehensive and gave me a lot of insights on how the characters are viewed by the readers. I am happy that the writing style and structure did not turn you off. I realize that ease of reading is one of the selling points of light novels, but I still wanted to add some flair to the text. Some of the banter and wordplay might be lost on some, but that is fine because those are short bonuses anyway. I think it is okay if the readers think that the characters are just pedantic jerks who prattle or keep beating around the bush because that is practically what they are doing sometimes (lol).
Well, I'm used to these kinds of styles since I am already reading LNs for more than 3 years. Just maintain the balance between simple and literary words and it will be okay.
True, Ageha can be sometimes unreasonable and in my opinion, I still feel it as normal. There are still worse characters than him in the first place but I believe that he is unique and the way you describe him is something that is entertaining.Kanda Hikaru wrote:Now for the personal comments:
Spoiler! :
Also, he can also be said as a lolicon since he still has a soft soft on younger girls, despite his character.
Regarding reference, I'd like to leave it like that since it gives me the uniqueness of one's work. Of course, you made your story based on numerous reference and I rely my commentaries based on the story you made all alone.
Putting it shortly, it's up to you whether you tell me your references in your work or not.
Writer of Tales of Mysidia : Paradox Heroes.
If you have extra time, kindly go for my thread and have a taste of my story. Any comments are welcome.
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If you have extra time, kindly go for my thread and have a taste of my story. Any comments are welcome.
Chance are, that I might be doing the same thing on yours ^_^V