Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 4 Chapter 3

Instead of "landmine" (which does kind of work, "It was a landmine topic that Joan brought up", as it means that it's a dangerous to talk about. "Minefield" would also work,) how about "taboo"? This makes it more generally an undesirable topic to talk about.

Instead of "Truth be told, Aoki knew a single strawberry was probably just a result of a margin of error."

How about: "Truth be told, Aoki knew a single strawberry was probably just a added on a whim"?

I kind of want to change:

"By the way, from my standpoint, I can't pretend I didn't see this you know."

to "By the way, as a woman, I can't pretend that I didn't see this you know." or even "By the way, I can't just pretend that I didn't see this you know."

"Standpoint" sounds a bit too formal, like it's a lawyer defending their client's "standpoint". By the way, I don't think saying "that" makes it too formal O.o.

Also, I don't really know what Aoki's "defining trait" is O.o. Is it his ability to poke fun at people? And because Inaba shut him up so quickly made him feel endangered?

Pikon (talk) 16:32, 16 October 2012 (CDT)

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Regarding landmine: If landmine sounds fine then I'll trust your opinion to that xD I think 'taboo' sounds a little too extreme as it ventures into the 'hot-button issue' category.

Regarding 'one a whim': Hmm, while the original text meant to say 'it was probably just an accident/happened by chance', I think the idea of 'on a whim' sounds close enough.

Regarding standpoint: I used standpoint a lot in my own speech, but I'm an oddball so my opinion wouldn't matter here. I only used standpoint here because Inaba said something along the lines of 'In her position/as herself'. Normally I would agree with your first proposal, but 'as a woman' seemed too specific for this case. She was being vague and sorta just hinting it to Yui, who obviously got what she meant right away. This flow is further supported by Aoki's observation and statement afterwards where he pointed out Inaba's message back at her. As for the third proposal... Er... I don't know, it seems confusing for me.

About the 'that', I don't know how to put it. It just seems too wordy for me in conversations. People tend to skip 'that' in those kinds of statement especially when it involves people as subject/object. I've checked a few literature on my shelf to confirm it. Maybe it's a regional/slang thing. However, I'm not going to argue about that any more, and I'll leave it to you guys. I see no reason in me obsessing myself over trivial details like that xD

Regarding Aoki's 'defining trait', As shown in his inner comment towards Inaba "So aboveboard!" That was supposed to be his defining trait, as mentioned earlier that "He had nothing to hide (He believed that this was his selling point.)"

——Lantern - Talk - 22:02, 16 October 2012 (CDT)

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I have a new question. Would 'Spring awake' >>> 'Sprung awake' a valid expression to describe how Aoki awoke on his bed?

——Lantern - Talk - 23:00, 16 October 2012 (CDT)