Yes, I think it should be fine to use disappear."But you know my embarrassing secret, so you'll have to go away"
Just a guess, but is "go away" better translated as 'disappear'?
The context for this isn't exactly sighing, as that word gives a feeling of relief, or tiredness. What we're going for is him exhaling, at the same time as he is doing that, he comes to remember about his things, so there's a bit of a change in the emotion of him letting out the breath, and it has more of a worried, exasperated feel to it...I don't know how to word that...I kind of don't like sighing...but hmmm..what about just "exhaling?" like you know, when you remember something, and exhale with that sense of "oh crap"...."Exhaling, Jin began to worry about his things." what do you think of that?"Letting out his breath, Jin all of a sudden started to worry about his things."
'Sighing, Jin suddenly started to worry about his things.'
The former is the original, the latter my suggestion. Your version is grammatically correct, though it can be simplified. How much leeway do you want to give me in terms of making sentences more elegant?
whoops..."thank" should be "that" ^_^“Thank junk, you don't need it.”
Is this some kind of play on words?
Let's go with Solomon's Treasure. From here on I'll try to write it that way as well. sorry for not keeping it the sameThis is just semantics but, "Treasure of Solomon" vs 'Solomon's Treasure'? Why one over the other?
Yep, totally don't need it"Ukyou waved his bamboo katana around angrily. He was usually always angry, but it was the first time Jin had seen the usually calm Ukyou with blood pulsing in his face."
"usually always" is redundant.
"usually calm" contradicts "usually angry."
. Let's go with 'usually angry'. Also, it seems a bit weird...you get the point though that Ukyou is usually anger, but calm about it, so this is the first time he actually seems to be portraying his anger, right? I just think I worded it a little wierd...what do you think?Ukyou is trying to say how he has to act like the parents would act, as all the guys live together in a dorm. The parents aren't there to take care of them, so Ukyou does. That's what he's trying to say. To redund-ify ^_^, Ukyou acts as the parents of the boarding students, as they are...boarding...as the parents cannot live with their children while they go to the dorm."It's the same for me as the parents, that I have to watch over the lives of each of the boarding students."
Unclear to me.
How about: "He was always angry, but it was the first time Jin had seen the usually level-headed Ukyou with blood pulsing in his face."Yep, totally don't need it
I'm thinking: "Just like your guys' parents, I have to watch over the lives of each of the boarding students."Ukyou is trying to say how he has to act like the parents would act, as all the guys live together in a dorm. The parents aren't there to take care of them, so Ukyou does. That's what he's trying to say. To redund-ify ^_^, Ukyou acts as the parents of the boarding students, as they are...boarding...as the parents cannot live with their children while they go to the dorm.
Your welcome, thanks for translating.Also, thanks Akira, you're editing is really helpful
Sorry, I just saw this post and felt a little strange... What is a bamboo katana? I heard of bamboo sword/blade, but not bamboo katana... Is there such a term?Krikit wrote:"Ukyou waved his bamboo katana around angrily. He was usually always angry, but it was the first time Jin had seen the usually calm Ukyou with blood pulsing in his face."
"usually always" is redundant.
"usually calm" contradicts "usually angry."
I like itHow about: "He was always angry, but it was the first time Jin had seen the usually level-headed Ukyou with blood pulsing in his face."
I like it tooI'm thinking: "Just like your guys' parents, I have to watch over the lives of each of the boarding students."
symbiotic relationship! wait...that's not it...or is itYour welcome, thanks for translating.
The word here in the Japanese novel was: 竹刀 （しない） the first kanji means bamboo, and the second means sword...the reason I translated it as katana, is because that second symbol in japanese is read as katana, and that's the japanese word for a japanese styled sword...but now that I think of it, I probably didn't need to do that, sword would have been fineSorry, I just saw this post and felt a little strange... What is a bamboo katana? I heard of bamboo sword/blade, but not bamboo katana... Is there such a term?
. I'll change it in a bit.And bamboos from what I know, cannot form curved blades? Katana are usually long and relatively thin from what I know... So I am guessing that expression may be wrong.A katana (刀, katana?) is a type of Japanese sword (nihontō), and is often called a "samurai sword." The term katana may be applied to any curved Japanese sword with a blade length of greater than 60 cm (23.6 inches).[1] The term is sometimes incorrectly used as a generic name for any kind of Japanese sword.
. I'll know what it means, so whatever will help the common man. No, not your Japanese ability, to know about shinai you need to know about Kendou, something that I don't think you'll learn from a language class.Krikit wrote:and Wikipedia once again reveals my still struggling japanese ability.../cry...
i guess let's go with bamboo sword...shinai is okay, but..."waving the shinai above his head...." or "waving the bamboo sword above his head...." maybe it's just me, but it seems 'bamboo sword' settles everything, and nobody needs to lookup meanings. (though shinai if used in context would be understood anyway...but only if you called it a bamboo sword earlier..idk..
in conclusion:
do whatever you guys want
Bamboo, like a pandaKrikit wrote: ...hmmm...what should I eat for dinner tonight....