<0000> May 16th (Wed)
// <0000> 5月16日(水)
<0001> \{Kyousuke} (Hey)
//<0001> \{恭介}「うぃす」
<0002> \{Kengo}「Morning」
//<0002> \{謙吾}「おはよう」
<0003> \{Masato}「Yo~」
//<0003> \{真人}「おー」
<0004> \{Riki}「Morning」
//<0004> \{理樹}「おはよう」
<0005> As usual all of us gather here to get breakfast。
//<0005> いつもの顔ぶれが朝食の場に揃う。
<0006> Rin is giving the cat milk and take care it(Probably Lennon the new cat)。
//<0006> 鈴は猫にミルクを与えている(恐らく新入りのレノンだ)。
<0007> Kyousuke is eating while reading newspaper in front of everyone。
//<0007> 恭介は新聞を読みながら、食べている。
<0008> \{Masato}「Do you have to read while eating like that?」
//<0008> \{真人}「なんか目を引く事件でもあったか?」
<0009> \{Kyousuke}「Yeah, it’s good to see what happened in the world right now」
//<0009> \{恭介}「ああ…嫌な事件が世の中起こるもんだぜ」
<0010> \{Kyousuke}「Rin, you should read the news more」
//<0010> \{恭介}「鈴、たまには新聞でも読んでみないか」
<0011> \{Rin} "........."
// <0011> \{鈴}「………」
<0012> \{Riki}「Rin, you should paying more attention to the world. Not just the cat…」
//<0012> \{理樹}「猫の食事に集中しすぎていて、聞いてないね…」
<0013> \{Kengo}「That kind of word coming from someone who only read manga」
//<0013> \{謙吾}「漫画ばっか読んでるおまえが言える台詞か」
<0014> \{Kyousuke}「Whatever、そういう俺も4コマ漫画目当てなんだが」
//<0014> \{恭介}「まあ、そういう俺も4コマ漫画目当てなんだが」
This script is coming from LB... i want to know if my TL is already good enough or not...
Can someone help me Proofread this?
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Can someone help me Proofread this?
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Re: Can someone help me Proofread this?
I can't say anything about the translation, but do you want it to be put into proper English as well?
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Re: Can someone help me Proofread this?
My Extreme problem is i understand about WTH is going on. but i can't seem to put the word into proper english...
btw, i remember that you can read jap or something.... any mistake w/ my Tl?
btw, i remember that you can read jap or something.... any mistake w/ my Tl?
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Re: Can someone help me Proofread this?
lol I can't read Japanese, but if I have the raw and time to do so, I can go over parts that I don't think make sense or sound out of context. I've edited the above in my quote below, changes are in bold.
TheDefend wrote:<0000> May 16th (Wed)
// <0000> 5月16日(水)
<0001> \{Kyousuke} (Hey)
//<0001> \{恭介}「うぃす」
<0002> \{Kengo}「Morning」
//<0002> \{謙吾}「おはよう」
<0003> \{Masato}「Yo~」
//<0003> \{真人}「おー」
<0004> \{Riki}「Morning」
//<0004> \{理樹}「おはよう」
<0005> As usual all of us gather here to get breakfast。
//<0005> いつもの顔ぶれが朝食の場に揃う。
<0006> Rin is giving the cat milk and taking care of it(Probably Lennon the new cat)。
//<0006> 鈴は猫にミルクを与えている(恐らく新入りのレノンだ)。
<0007> Kyousuke is eating while reading the newspaper in front of everyone。
//<0007> 恭介は新聞を読みながら、食べている。
<0008> \{Masato}「Do you have to read while eating like that?」
//<0008> \{真人}「なんか目を引く事件でもあったか?」
<0009> \{Kyousuke}「Yeah, it’s good to see what is happening in the world right now」
//<0009> \{恭介}「ああ…嫌な事件が世の中起こるもんだぜ」
<0010> \{Kyousuke}「Rin, you should read the news more」
//<0010> \{恭介}「鈴、たまには新聞でも読んでみないか」
<0011> \{Rin} "........."
// <0011> \{鈴}「………」
<0012> \{Riki}「Rin, you should pay more attention to the world. Not just the cat…」
//<0012> \{理樹}「猫の食事に集中しすぎていて、聞いてないね…」
<0013> \{Kengo}「Those kind of words coming from someone who only reads manga」
//<0013> \{謙吾}「漫画ばっか読んでるおまえが言える台詞か」
<0014> \{Kyousuke}「Whatever、そういう俺も4コマ漫画目当てなんだが」
//<0014> \{恭介}「まあ、そういう俺も4コマ漫画目当てなんだが」
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Re: Can someone help me Proofread this?
Looks good Though it needs a bit of tweaking here and there.
"Yeah... Amazing things are going on in the world"
"And that's coming from someone who reads nothing but manga"
"Whatever, then I'm target material for 4-koma manga"
Being picky, but the Jap text doesn't mention "in front of everyone".TheDefend wrote: <0007> Kyousuke is eating while reading newspaper in front of everyone。
//<0007> 恭介は新聞を読みながら、食べている。
"Is there anything good/interesting in the news?"TheDefend wrote: <0008> \{Masato}「Do you have to read while eating like that?」
//<0008> \{真人}「なんか目を引く事件でもあったか?」
<0009> \{Kyousuke}「Yeah, it’s good to see what happened in the world right now」
//<0009> \{恭介}「ああ…嫌な事件が世の中起こるもんだぜ」
"Yeah... Amazing things are going on in the world"
"She's too busy feeding the cat- she can't hear you..."TheDefend wrote: <0012> \{Riki}「Rin, you should paying more attention to the world. Not just the cat…」
//<0012> \{理樹}「猫の食事に集中しすぎていて、聞いてないね…」
<0013> \{Kengo}「That kind of word coming from someone who only read manga」
//<0013> \{謙吾}「漫画ばっか読んでるおまえが言える台詞か」
<0014> \{Kyousuke}「Whatever、そういう俺も4コマ漫画目当てなんだが」
//<0014> \{恭介}「まあ、そういう俺も4コマ漫画目当てなんだが」
"And that's coming from someone who reads nothing but manga"
"Whatever, then I'm target material for 4-koma manga"