Talk:Ancient Magic Arc Volume 1: Prologue
The synopsis is quite good. Though I think your prologue needs slight review.My concern is the syntax issues including sentence structure. The reader may become lost at certain points. Also try and spice of the word choice to fit your style of writing.
The world is filled with many mysteries from the past, that have many kinds of tales that have been told to every person around the world with their many different cultures, races, and beliefs.
There exist many different kinds of tales, histories, and stories of kings, heroes, and saviors and in every kind of the tale there will be some kind of lyrics, remnants, and weapons with unknown power. "
The world is filled with many mysteries from former times. There are many classes of tales that have spread to entire populations separated by their cultures, races, and beliefs.
These not so ordinary tales exist of kings, heroes, and saviors in scrolls of scholars, lyrics of the bards, poets’ rhymes, eyes and ears of the common folk always leaving remnants of their tales yet each tale possess distinguished aspect of unknown. While some tales speak of lyrics, weapons, and others of the former time remnants each tale is of power.
As a reader I want to be captured in your story. Words should trigger my vision of your world. The above is edited text while maintaining your context.
past : former times - Inspires vision of an time that has long pasted.
"...past, that have ...." - After the usage of the word past the sentence becomes confusing. I have rewritten the sentence while maintaining your context.
The second sentence is okay yet still slightly confusing. The sentence isn't properly connected. The usage of "and" isn't appropriate. I rewrote your sentence again while still maintaining your context. I only took my time to make these suggestions because I adore your story. Good job!
It's a great story, but I think it overall needs some proofreading. I love this idea
